Allure of the Abandoned Place



See that structure on which green creepers climb?
It could have been rather grand at one time.
Almost missed it-hidden back in the trees
I love this about old places like these.

Abandoned; near lost from sheer neglect,
It beckons to me to come and inspect;
To see that even with boards hanging loose,
It’s more striking now than back when in use.

Don’t ask me why I cannot look away.
Or why I think it would be fun to stay.
As answers to these, I cannot provide,
Knowing the risk of a venture inside.

I find it rather compelling, you see.
This old place quietly calls out to me.
Vines grown across an empty, black window
Cause me to wonder how long it’s been so.

It brings to mind childhood fictions I’ve read,
Hans Christian Andersen yarns fill my head.
Pictures recalled from these lost fairy tales,
Of witches, gardens, and shadowy trails.

A place like this may have stories to tell,
Built with some purpose it may have served well,
Then, one day deserted- no one returned.
Never restored- there was no one concerned.

Not torn down; it was simply vacated.
Yet, while it’s now deteriorated,
To this home where past and present collides,
Some haunting mystique its neglect provides.


Perhaps someone left a trinket behind
A treasure for someone later to find.
Perhaps some forgotten passage in there
Takes you down to a secret room somewhere.

Bones might be found in a darkened corner
Key to a cold case for some old mourner.
Maybe old furniture is still arranged
Layers of dust, but otherwise unchanged.

Could be a cradle in an upstairs room;
A vial of rare and exotic perfume;
A letter with bombshell news on a desk;
(Or something unspeakable and grotesque).

Could be signs inside of habitants there-
Clothing or familiar scent in the air.
I’d get quite the scare if that was the case,
And turn to run for the door with great haste!

For now, I’ll just snap a photo or two
And try to imagine this house brand new.
For fantasy fodder, I’ll dream up ghosts
And wonder if anyone else it hosts.

Some call it “eerie”; I say “bewitching.”
To take a tour inside I am itching
But to enter would spoil its mystery,
Though not likely give up its history.

If I leave right now, its charm stays intact.
Fun fancies are spoiled by looked-upon fact.
Daydreaming transforms the commonplace.
That’s the allure of the abandoned place.

About this poem

I've always loved abandoned places, whether they're shacks, homes, schools, towns, or castles. People find it odd and ask me why in the world I would like something like this. This poem is my way of trying to answer the question.

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Written on April 12, 2023

Submitted by Laurelmlee on April 27, 2023

Modified by Laurelmlee on June 18, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABB CCDD EEFF GGHH IIJJ KKLL XXMM NNOO PPQQ RRSS OOTX UUVV SXGG WWTT
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 2,362
Words 476
Stanzas 14
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 5, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4

Laurel M. Lee

When I was little, my grandfather had me believing I'd be a famous poet someday. Of course, life never turns out the way you plan, does it? Still, I do have a litle fun with it from time to time. This first contest submission of mine today is the first one I've written in several years, and I only wrote it because a friend's gift inspired me. I could never stick to the rules of the various poetry styles, but have always enjoyed the ones that rhyme. I've long been a fan of Edgar Allan Poe's "Annabel Lee" and John Masefield's "Sea Fever". Having been born in Alaska, I also love Robert Service's "Cremation of Sam McGee". I have a two teenagers and my husband and I will celebrate our 20th anniversary this year. more…

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  • dougb.19255
    Your bio mentions a love for Robert Service of the Northland.

    https://www.poetry.com/poem/147948/is-it-ending?---(tribute-to-robert-service)
    LikeReply1 year ago
  • dougb.19255
    Those aging, moss covered, historic places deserve to continue standing. Magical views and thoughts to spur the imagination, and to allow some wanderers to enter into Romantic history and abide therein for a while. In my imagination, entrance into such places would not be violation…Doug…very good work. Yes a fiver of stars. 
    LikeReply1 year ago
  • JokerGem
    You're very welcome....great job in the contest too. I had a feeling about you!
    LikeReply1 year ago
    • Laurelmlee
      That’s so nice! Thank you!
      LikeReply 11 year ago
  • Chinonyeisraeluche
    I like your poem. Jisike.
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • JokerGem
    Pardon, - 'Artist"
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • JokerGem
    This is a fun ride (and read)--nicely done. Also, good luck in the contest with "Author Unknown.". ~Jeffrey
    LikeReply 11 year ago

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