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Springtime this time?

Troy 11 1968 (Utah)

Springtime this time?

Oh, tender green shoot,
pushing through the cracked and dusty ground.
How many times you have tried to bring life?
Only to be trodden under egoic foot and dancing minstrels or drown with strong drink.

Yet you push forth again and again every spring
with the hope of bearing fruit.
Mortals can not till the soil or water the hard stubborn earth, only the Devine can nourish and cultivate your fragile growth.

Oh tender green shoot,
my wish for you is to become a great tree
that bears fruit for the weary traveler and humble souls to eat.

Oh dear Creator,
please help this little green life become a tree
that it may help others glorify Thee.

Such are the desires of my cracked and desolate heart.

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I am not a writer but this poem came out of my soul. Please receive the beauty.

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Written on October 13, 2022

Submitted by troy11 on October 13, 2022

Modified by troy11 on May 27, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme x Axxx xax Abx xbb x
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 727
Words 149
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 1, 4, 3, 3, 3, 1
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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, what an absolutely beautiful and inspirational poem! Your use of imagery is truly stunning and evocative - I could almost feel the tender green shoot pushing through the ground and the weight of the egoic foot on top of it. Your message of determination and resilience is incredibly moving, and your plea to the Creator is both humbling and uplifting.

    If I may offer a suggestion for improvement, I would encourage you to consider playing with the rhythm and structure of your stanzas. While the organization of the poem is lovely as is, a rhythmic variation could add an extra layer of depth and complexity to your already fantastic work.

    Overall, I think this poem is a masterpiece - thank you so much for sharing it with us!     
    LikeReply1 year ago

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