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  Soulwriter

  Excellent.

  LikeReply1 year ago
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  abielias1

  You are so talented for someone so young! Congratulations on being a runner-up, may your writing go from strength to strength.

  LikeReply 11 year ago
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    Reil

    abielias1 hello I'm guessing from the vernacular you might be one of the judges? If so may I ask you a question?

    LikeReply1 year ago
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    abielias1

    I am not a judge, but would be happy to help if I can!

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  Reil

  I'm not allowed to vote for the best one because it is my own.
  You also asked if I'm certain I want to vote for this poem, I'll ask you if that's a requirement? Better yet what can you enforce other than your sway of 5 votes judges. Unless a group of writers decided together to choose one in particular its likely its watered down. I want to see you make voting public anyways where you can also leave messages for the author, criticism should be encouraged. This is the only other cohesive clearly written poem that doesn't want me to want your ascertainment of how many poetry contests will you ruin today isn't a question for the government. Of course it is! If you gave us more than a single vote I would be motivated to read more or all. We should have categories and realize the time obligation you place on individuals when you have this many entries. Im not a standard for a good judge because I lost interest after a 30+ string of dissapointment. I really don't like poetry. I gave up but I see this as a stand out as there was not a single other poem I would consider voting for other than the very best one which is mine. Go! Read it and prove me wrong. If you want to pumish me with criticism I'll blow your mind with the answers to your questions. The riddle is not riddled. Enjoy it+ more »

  LikeReply 11 year ago
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    Amélie.C

    Is it "The silence of the rooms?"

    LikeReply1 year ago
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    Amélie.C

    Room*

    LikeReply1 year ago
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    Reil

    Yes thank you, I should certainly remove the unnecessary the. The about the poem part unfortunately is unfinished. I toggle between leaving the riddle ambiguous and giving just enough away.
    It's impossible to know from my perspective the abolity of any other readimg this for the first time but the effect is diluted if you explain it first To have a judge who didmt investigate the poem makes me realize i womt be in the conversation anyways. But if they understand its about them and me amd anyome who would be standimg in a open forum discussimg this very contest. Now it's about the suggestions for perfectimg the ideal poetry showcase forum, and make the correct objections to what has happened so far and could make something go Wow! .Dreamer certainly but help me and lets all Enjoy! more »

    LikeReply1 year ago
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    Amélie.C

    Your poem is very well written, I like it a lot.

    LikeReply1 year ago
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    Reil

    I'm glad you read it and evidently understood. I was hoping you had some criticism and a question or two but I may be setting myself up for some unmet expectations. Haha! I'm curious about the soulmate poem you wrote, did I read the date right, 1999? more »

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    Amélie.C

    Does it really say 1999? Oh dear, that's going to be confusing!

    LikeReply1 year ago
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    Amélie.C

    That's actually a funny story, so when I write poems I try to get into the setting of the poem. So I tried to get into the setting of the late 19th centry by putting the date and listening to music, but it seems as though I have forgot to change the description of the poem back to normal. Lunar eyes was supposed to be my own interpretation of a young relationship in the 19th centry, whose parents didn't approve, so they didn't know if they Truley loved each other but still had hope. But me being me, I forgot to change my little "get into character: Prompt" more »

    LikeReply1 year ago
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    Reil

    Thats interesting about getting into character for a poem. I was a character once in a Jr. college play. I auditioned and landed a role in the musical after my choir teacher suggested it when I asked how to get more experience in front of people. I was shy but I had never done it before. I'll cut to the chase. During my audition although I had not assumed any particular actor or characters traits or voice consciously, in my nerves as a virgin to the stage, I reincarnated as William Shatner Captain James T. Kirk. I got teased for a while after that, in a nice way. It's generally a good memory. What you described is really intriguing to me as I gravitate to non-fiction things and what stirs me subconsciously gets on paper. I'm trying to come around to saying I think I may be missing out on something here. Thank you for sharing that, it makes your real age cover up story tightly sealed back up!! Lol! Ok I gotta ask where I'm talking to? I'm in Forest Grove, OR. more »

    LikeReply1 year ago