Analysis of What If You Disappear? / Что если ты исчезнешь вдруг?



I found myself giving a thought:
What if you simply disappear?
My life is going to gain dramatic plot.
Intolerable emptiness will get me sear.

I can imagine how you're leaving
Forgetting all that we've been through.
A sole tear fills my glassy eyes; they're deceiving.
No one will ever take your lieu.

My tiny universe is grimly ruined
You did that by your farewell glance.
Turned me into eternal bedouin
Wandering through debris as though being in trance.

I see the blurry image everywhere.
I feel your absence with my skin –
So cold; you used to warm it with your hair.
Rejecting post-apocalyptic life, do I commit a sin?

I am so close to insanity.
When have you punched my strong membrane?
Perhaps the time I plunged in your divinity.
My minds have to get purified by pouring rain.

You suddenly were gone and now I cannot breathe.
Choking air's enveloping my lungs.
You took away life-giving oxygen; I miss
Those flawless motions of our tongues.

I'm broken, I try to ease
The mental hurricane, where dwells just pain,
While something tears me out of kiss
With my delusion unless I am completely drained.

My body feels soft touch, you're by my side.
Your gray blue eyes are so clear.
But it continues haunting me, this awful thought I fight:
What if you simply disappear?
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This is a Russian version of this poem

Я в меланхолии думу впал:
Что если ты исчезнешь вдруг?
И образ будто явью стал,
Оковами объяв вокруг.

Вижу меня ты покидаешь,
Забыв, что жизни сплетены.
Мою слезу не утираешь,
А мысли в грусть обрамлены.

Вселенную внутри ждал крах,
В этом вина украдкой взгляда,
Что ты, с сомнением в глазах,
Мне бросила как искру ада.

Мерещится твой лик повсюду,
И кожа хладна без тебя.
Те чувства хоронить не буду,
Лишь жизнь отвергну я, любя.

К безумству шаг один остался,
Ведь ты полсердца отняла.
К богине грешник прикасался,
Та дерзость эту приняла.

Затем исчезла столь поспешно,
Я задыхаюсь вновь и вновь.
Слиянья губ были мятежны,
А в жилах закипала кровь.

Я сломлен, и не обуздать
Душевной боли терпкий стон.
Мираж меня смог обаять
И погрузить в терзаний сон.

Сквозь дрему вижу я улыбку,
Глаза, что серы с синевой.
Дорога счастья слишком зыбка,
В любви живут одной судьбой.


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Poetic Form
Metre 1111001 1111001 11110110101 010001001111 110101110 01011111 011111011010 11110111 1101011010 1111111 1101010100 100101111001 110101010 11110111 1111111111 010100101110101 111110100 1111111 010111010100 11111101101 110001011101 101010011 110111010011 110101101 1101111 010101111 11011111 1101001110101 1101111111 1111111 11010101110111 1111001 1 11010101110 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1 1
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 2,840
Words 382
Sentences 37
Stanzas 17
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 5, 1, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 66
Letters per line (avg) 16
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 63
Words per stanza (avg) 22
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Submitted on October 09, 2013

Modified on March 05, 2023

1:56 min read
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Den Khaustov

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