Analysis of Impotent Vigils



The president’s lament is again for rent.
The gun control proposals came and went.  
We just pray, posture, petition, and vent.
Trying to decide leaves us all so spent.

As we move toward the motives,
We implore a new score of votives.
Our leader, so prone to conceding,
Deaths mount faster than pleading.

God’s will is set; not to refute our choices.
Won’t help us hear, all the muted voices.
A rose mounted to counter acts illicit.
Grace, not found for the innocent or complicit.  

Consulting talking heads and shrinks,
Without knowing what the dead child thinks.
Not to exhume from silent souls of the dead,  
Left to speculate and debate instead.  

The gnawing fear they defend with rigor,
Grants consent to pull the trigger.
So satisfied, they scold, and they blame,
Darkening the remaining souls in shame.

We look for truth with eyes averted.
To find self-righteousness perverted.
To insist free living is of life and death,
Past the victims’ last gasping breath.  

Al Bartolis 2022


Scheme AAAA BBCC DDEE FFGG HHII XXJJ B
Poetic Form
Metre 0100110111 0101010101 1111001001 101111111 11101010 10101111 1010111010 1110110 111111011010 1111101010 01101101010 111101001010 01010101 011010111 11011101101 111000101 0101101110 10111010 11011011 1000010101 111111010 111100010 10111011101 10101101 11
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,088
Words 203
Sentences 18
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 1
Lines Amount 25
Letters per line (avg) 31
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 110
Words per stanza (avg) 24

About this poem

Over Independence Day weekend there were 16 mass shootings across 13 states where 15 people were killed. This is how we expressed our brotherly love for one another. This poem points to the absurd and unconscionable approach we take toward this horrific issue. I wrote this poem to transmute some of that grotesque karma, because prayers from the hearts of the indifferent masses can not raise the consciousness of complacent nor the shattered remains of the dead.

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Written on June 15, 2022

Submitted by ABP57 on July 08, 2023

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Al Bartolis

I am an elementary school teacher by trade. I feel that being of service to others is one of the most joyous and meaning things one can do in their life. The challenges of that work environment, as well as the state of our world, our country and our communities, impel me to write. I therefore write for reconciliation, restoration, and revelation. Writing, for me is very powerful, because it calls me to be honest. Therefore it is one of the most meaningful things I can do. more…

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