Analysis of Middle of the Ocean



In the middle of the ocean I lie
There is not a single cloud in the sky
The sun beams down and browns my skin evenly
Drying my skin like a towel, boiling my blood like tea;

I close my eyes. I tune out my surroundings
The waves rock me to sleep, mounting the boat like a carriage,
Surrounded by the scent of sandalwood and a hint of jasmine
The world is my oyster, and with one bite, I take it all in.

The soothing cool of the ocean blue
I dip my hand in and feel it brew
The crash of the waves stirs it smooth
Numbing my skin so blue it bruised;

I open my tired eyes and look around
Amidst the endless sea, there is no sound
For only the pumping of my blood creates new music
I breathe in the ocean mist, transfuse it into me

For a moment, there is no struggle. No doubts or regrets
Every mistake made like sweat, evaporating, no longer absorbed back in
I am the ocean, and I will teach my mind to swim
Allow my consciousness to grow dim, find inner peace limb to limb

The warmth of the eternal light brings familiar comfort
I smile, lay me down for my final slumber
My ocean eyes flood the boat, sinking me down
And I finally learn to breathe as I drown.

In the middle of the ocean, I lie
Where else would I die?


Scheme Aabb xxxc ddxx eexb xcff xxgg Aa
Poetic Form
Metre 0010101011 1110101001 01110111100 10111010101111 11111111010 01111110011010 01010111001110 011110011111110 010110101 111100111 01101111 10111111 11011010101 0101011111 11001011101110 1100101011011 10101111011101 1000111101001100110 1101001111111 0111001111101111 01100101101010 11111111010 11011011011 01100111111 0010101011 11111
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,219
Words 256
Sentences 5
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 2
Lines Amount 26
Letters per line (avg) 36
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 135
Words per stanza (avg) 35

About this poem

This piece was written as an exploration of my passion for sailing and swimming but also written as an existential exploration of finding peace.

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Written on March 31, 2023

Submitted by noahc_ishere on April 06, 2023

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Noah Carmona

Hi! My name is Noah. I am a seventeen-year-old writer from Vermont, originally hailing from Illinois. I am a junior in high school, and I have been pursuing the art of writing since 6th grade through modes like essays, stories, and poems. I have had my work published in newspapers such as Burlington Free Press, and VTDigger on behalf of the Young Writer's Project. I have also had my work cited in a Seven Days Article about fish and chips. I enjoy biking, swimming, acting, cooking, and hiking. You can see more of my work here: https://youngwritersproject.org/user/1528 more…

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