Analysis of Pain gardens



On the land of sorrow and unfinished vows.
Located two  inseparable souls with no rouse
Two bridges receiving the sun light
So high, so far, but with all the winds around fight
Two  sparkles , two flames holding on to a dream but what a shame
Dying for a touch for a closer gaze, eye to eye such a horrible lame
Telling her with a loud voice "Tell me what's been happening, what's been on your mind
Lately, you've been searching for a darker place to hide
She says with all her heart on plate" if u look into the distance between us there's a million reasons to have fears
"Don't worry love" he says, hold on to me i'll be one day near u wiping your tears...
Whenever they look up to the moon
 they whisper in wishing as if they r with that golden spoon
"This distance won't took me away and in front of all the hardships m promising you to stay
And between this distance i 'll build a lighthouse  
Where the lights always on as the lamps of our wishes
Guiding you to me if you lost your way
And makes you feel it warm as the fall of my kisses
It's our safe place when all we can feel is this grace
Of having each other enjoying the pain  that i wish to erase..
As if you are floating above the sea of Indecisiveness "
She gasped "oh my dear i'm begging for causing you all this pain, forgiveness"
This lust of being near each other is a burden that they  both share
Two sinners can't atone and its not fair
Two souls tied intertwined by pride and guilt
Of many years they spent wishing to meet even if it requires a lot of blood to  split
There's always dark in that distance
 from the way they been living but they know they can't resist it
They loved it and hate at the same time
Her  and him drinking poison from the same vine..


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Closest metre Iambic heptameter
Characters 1,748
Words 356
Sentences 5
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 29
Lines Amount 29
Letters per line (avg) 46
Words per line (avg) 12
Letters per stanza (avg) 1,346
Words per stanza (avg) 346

About this poem

Distance, loving from distance is such a bitter pain two souls can feel, but it's so sweet that even the pain they share becomes comfort for them..

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Written on April 26, 2023

Submitted by nadou_h on April 26, 2023

Modified on April 27, 2023

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Nadarine Ghiloufi

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