Analysis of Ray

Hali oumer 2005 (Ethiopia)



Your eyes scream,
Your mouth just sighs,
Your nose wrinkled,
Your eyebrows rise.
You twirl around,
On a muddy ground,
And hope to see,
A flicker of light,
Make its way through,
The holes in your heart.
You dig and dig,
Then find a ray.
You stop searching,
And embrace it, "hey!"
"I finally found it,
Its my lucky day"
You don't bend down,
or look at it.
You just keep it safe,
Tucked inside your heart.
And wait for your way,
And your life to be,
Brighter, clearer,
For everyone to see.
You ignore the heat,
That's in your heart.
You pretend not to be,
Hurting inside.
You say its worth it,
That the ray's your light.
You never once look down,
To see for what it is.
your friends see the fire,
where the ray came from,
They tell you to let go,
That you're better alone.
You never listen though,
And the flame burns your soul.
If you had digged deeper,
You would have seen the flame,
Or rather found better,
The one that you deserve.
But you held on to it,
Even if deep down you knew,
That It's a toxic one,
And would destroy you.

So please don't forget,
The rays are countless.
The ones that you found first,
Don't have to be the best.
There might be a brighter one,
You should just did deeper,
Don't settle for the gold,
The diamond is bigger


Scheme XAXABBCDEFXGXGHGIHXFGCJCXFCXHDIXJXKXKXJXJXHELE XXXXLJXJ
Poetic Form
Metre 111 1111 1110 111 1101 10101 0111 01011 1111 01011 1101 1101 1110 00111 110011 11101 1111 1111 11111 10111 01111 01111 1010 11011 10101 1011 101111 1001 11111 10111 110111 111111 111010 10111 111111 111001 110101 001111 111110 111101 110110 011101 111111 1011111 110101 01011 11101 01110 011111 111101 1110101 111110 110101 010110
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,246
Words 293
Sentences 18
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 46, 8
Lines Amount 54
Letters per line (avg) 17
Words per line (avg) 4
Letters per stanza (avg) 469
Words per stanza (avg) 120

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This poem is dedicated for people in a toxic relationship

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Written on December 08, 2022

Submitted by Halioumer15 on December 08, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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