Analysis of Scratches and Stones



We walk hand in hand. The sand
is full of stones. The slide
has no shine, no arc, no glide.
The trees have scratches, black and gray.
My girl wants to play, so we stay.

She is quick to find a stick. Then
down on the ground. She scratches
the shape of her name, forgets the rust,
she is glad we came.

I am alone beside her, want to guide her.
Perhaps by a shake of my head. But instead
Find a stick of my own and a stone to take home.

Who is this parent? It's apparent
That I missed the moment when I
Could have shown her the strength of the sky
While her shirt dragged in the dirt.

She is done. I let her run
away from me.
Watching incessantly, I let her be.
This is not about me.


Scheme XAABB XXXX XXX XCCX XDDD
Poetic Form Etheree  (25%)
Tetractys  (20%)
Metre 1110101 111101 1111111 01110101 11111111 11111011 1101110 011010101 11111 11010101110 01101111101 101111001111 111101010 11101011 111001101 1011001 1111101 0111 1001001101 111011
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 695
Words 162
Sentences 18
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 5, 4, 3, 4, 4
Lines Amount 20
Letters per line (avg) 26
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 103
Words per stanza (avg) 28

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Parenting.

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Written on October 15, 2022

Submitted by Teril on November 13, 2022

Modified by Teril on December 23, 2022

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