Down, down, down

For a moment, it was like stars in the sky,
A clear soft liquid,
Yet salty when a drop of it touch the sense of my taste,
Gently kissing me as my body enveloped it,
I watched the ripples turned into gallows as I sink into the abyys.

A gasp of pure sincerity,
Something that would forever move my body,
As I plunged below the world that forever clouded my mind,
I sunked,
Down, down and down.

Until I couldn’t  see sparks of the world anymore,
Until I couldn’t see him anymore.

And as I took my last breath of happiness,
Bofore I sunk down to the deep pool of sadness and fear,
I had one last though of my happiness,
him, him, him
As I sunk, taking the happiness away from me.

Taking him away from me.

And I sunk,
Down, down, and down.

About this poem

This poem tell a story of a heart-broken teenage girl that commit suicide. Recently, I read a book of a bunch of highschoolers in their senior year recklessly in love and getting heart-broken at the end, this book inspired me to write this poem.

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Written on September 20, 2022

Submitted by NurAliyahLuq on September 30, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme xaxxb ccxaD ee bxbxc c xD
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 746
Words 168
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 5, 5, 2, 5, 1, 2

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