Analysis of Move

Ariel Fleming 2005 (Greenwood, MS)



You sit in a pile of ashes, all from past sins
You throw sticks and stones at me
When you see my ash pile is running thin
Why are you mad at me, for being the best I can be
You point your gun at me, cause you know I'll succeed
Hoping it'll bring me down
but now you have a frown when I just walk around
Are you upset because every step I take
is with confidence and pride
While you sit in a seat with nothing but defeat and lies
Are you upset because I can't forget the times
I held out my hand and you pulled me down
So you could have the higher grounds
I cannot hate you, for you seem to do that to yourself
I can pray for you, and wish for better in your health
For I have a road to walk, cause that is god plan
I will not allow you to chain me here
keep me from my goals, with a distance
Anger is no use to me, for it won't help me move along
I will say it surprises me
how your eyes hold so much hate
Mad at someone else
cause you refuse to change your fate
Now I bid your fair well, my old friend
I pray to God, you come to your sense
And not let the ash trail you led here
Build once again


Scheme ABCBDEEFGHIEJKLMNOPBQRQSTNU
Poetic Form
Metre 110011101111 1110111 1111111101 11111111001111 111111111101 1010111 111101111101 110101100111 1110001 11100111010101 110101110101 1111101111 11110101 11011111111101 1111101110011 111011111111 1110111111 111111010 101111111111101 11110101 1111111 1111 11011111 111111111 111111111 011011111 1101
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,107
Words 248
Sentences 1
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 27
Lines Amount 27
Letters per line (avg) 31
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 845
Words per stanza (avg) 238

About this poem

This poem is about a broken relationship. Where one person is getting better in life while the other continues to get worse. Because of this they try to drag the other down but they don’t give in.

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Written on March 07, 2023

Submitted by arielfleming05 on January 10, 2024

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Ariel Fleming

I am a senior in high school who’s interested in the arts. I really love doing things like writing poetry, songs, stories. While I have other interests as well like acting, drawing and modeling. more…

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