Analysis of The ones that didn’t matter



i went down, i made the fall.
smashing through
these fragile walls
Ill buy you a new toothbrush,
you can teach me about trust
a subject that you
were not well versed,
we left that city in the dust

Creeping up on
this December,
last year wasn't much
to see or remember
Maybe for you,
a prisoners moon,
but for me you didn't
come too soon

You left stains
of your pain on me
It dripped like grease
then you rained on me.
There’s  clay in my bucket,
so fuck it
with plenty of room for two
we go around
upside down~

And when the dust settles..
moth balls will lay at your feet
Infused in confusion
 there's a black black kettle
I’m insane with the pain
but i don't rust with the water

It’s  cold without you,
but we never slept with the sheets.

We went down
and we went far,
in your bed
or in my car
All the flour
none the bread-
hour by hour,
words that shred

I could buy you
a new tooth brush
You could teach me things
about the human touch
secrets that crush,
but mostly just lust.
Draw my line
so i don't say too much
This the truth, my pursuit


Scheme XAXBCAXC XDEDAFXF XGXGXXAXH XXXXXD AX HIJIDJDJ ABXEBCXEX
Poetic Form Tetractys  (42%)
Etheree  (30%)
Metre 1111101 101 1101 1110110 1111011 00111 0111 11110001 1011 1010 11101 111010 1011 01001 111110 111 111 11111 1111 11111 110110 111 1101111 1101 111 010110 1111111 010010 101110 101101 11111010 11011 11101101 111 0111 011 1011 1010 101 10110 111 1111 0111 11111 010101 1011 11011 111 111111 101101
Closest metre Iambic dimeter
Characters 1,068
Words 239
Sentences 6
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 8, 8, 9, 6, 2, 8, 9
Lines Amount 50
Letters per line (avg) 16
Words per line (avg) 4
Letters per stanza (avg) 115
Words per stanza (avg) 30
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Submitted by Abedmoore on September 10, 2023

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