rnadc
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Can't decide if the use of words and flow of this poem is better than the clear, great theme. Both are SO good.
Well done...

Good stuff...

yeah. Do NOT want to witness that mating process

thanks so much, Symnetry58. That guy, "D", didn't much care for it. He is the 1st "poetry troll" I have run across.

yeah, I didn't like it either.

The Winner because: it moves you, transports you. Stays with you. Great use of imagery. It is rhymed, but not overtly so as to be cliche.

T.Y.

this month is SO tough. I have whittled it down to 10 (with great effort). I am finding it exceedingly difficult to pick just 1

hey, Teri.
Thanks so much for commenting on my poems. It means a lot.
Russ

A sort of light-hearted tribute to something beloved by many in days past. It is, I think, well-structured, nicely rhymed, and doesn't waste a lot of time or space getting it's point across. An elagy to a machine. more »

Forgot a while....about the little things
Nice

After the 1st read, I realized this is meaningful and well-put, though I didn't completely get it
After 3rd read, I get it. How many unwanted twists must a man wrench himself into until he expresses love, for real?
Depends on the man... more »

I liked "please part the waters, and let me win". Some good stuff in there.
I hope you find some tranquility

Yeah, that..
What is the energy of the Soul?
An infinite number of kilocalories per mole...

2004? OK. I did the math. Very good writing, young lady. So much insight for a 17-18 year old. There are are several things so good about this. But, especially showing the way you (or whoever the 1st person is) viewed the world before and after whatever happened. Doesn't really matter who "you two" are (parents, betrayors, attackers), the point is made.
Keep up the good work more »