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Perhaps we all know death? Remember being before birth? Were we dead then and are we back? Is there conciousness with out time or a body of flesh and blood? Is there just sleep with cyclic awakenings, or is there nothing at all? Do we know anything, or do we just think we do?
Form ...No form
Form ...No form
Form ...No form Are you a sacrificial Aztec princess ???
Speaking of roller coaster love....
He terrorized her with titillating thrills
as if her body where his fun house and amusement park
of loopty loops and Ferris wheels like an air castle in that little damp cubby hole fantasy of umbra sweet curves marked Venus dreamscapemore »
Thanks for getting back and I am my greatest fan unfortunately
haahaahaa :) Aren't we all.
Everybody wants to be heard, but hearing others carefully and being useful to them requires patience and discipline. We are not saints so we have to be coaxed into conversations and risk the complexity of the dialectic. Opinions make poets flammable.more »
That sounds really good Jhain ... I thought about your suicide poem and it alluded yo. (between the lines) the idea of disjuncture or a kind of sensual letting go, dissolution and release. What do u think?
Hi I'm new here but not new to poetry, poetry platforms , both passive and interactive, being published and participating in over a hundred workshops. On that basis I do have some thoughts for what its worth in terms of your desire to create more dynamic engagement, relevance and expansion.
I notice that with in a split second of posting a poem I have been favorited. I love attention but what does it mean if it is produced by a algorithm, and my fan is a cyborg? Do you think this site needs to create frequent and real interaction?
Everyone wants attention, to be read and to be read by someone they respect and whos opinion strikes a chord and that they TRUST. One of the challenges of workshops is that there's lots of inexperienced writers critiquing each other. Its improbable that much is gained except frustration under those circumstances, although being favorited or kind comments by another is always encouraging.
So the question remains how to create a structure to accomplish this if you want it?
Nothing is easy, nothing is perfect. How does one hear criticism without feeling discouraged? Every light casts a shadow, yet with out dynamic interaction and those points of illumination there is only posting into a void and the emotional emptiness that comes with it.
Perhaps these are something's you are already thinking about?
Best Zmore »
Thank you Jhain
I love to get baited by a poem. I write a lot about death, erotascism ,the sacrificial and felt a possible undertone of that in your poem You've got me wondering if your poem suggests this?
" tell me how she hooked your mind" :)
Is Jane Doe JhainDoh? Like toe tag jewelry with a little kink ? Is that a kind of beauty in death ?
takes the shadowed vow
bride of submission
happy in his hands
falling as silence falls
she spreads like bat wing umbrellasmore »