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You think you are dealing with a muse? Nope. You are a little buddy creator, lining up alongside the Chief Creator. Muses are remote and weird and spooky, up some mountain for the Greeks to nose about in foolish diggings of the occult. more »

The love response is the birthplace and dynamo of righteous ways and initiatives to serve or to comfort. As Jesus has fashioned things. Don't sweat it. He comes at just the right moment. We might not think so, but...Douglas Blair
Initially I thought to abandon this message because of its short length. But then succinct does equal a poem. I read many here who go on with fancy words a long ways after they are finished...Douglas Blair more »

You mention the word naked, and of course everybody will look at your poem, Ma’am. Sort of a fun ride with a bowlful of grumpiness. But about half way through you lose the cadence and metre. Wirk on that. I know you can…Douglas Blair. more »

The rhythmic flow is beautiful. I think the poem contains an honest hope for return of the caresses of the Beloved. This is the stuff of Song of Solomon in the Old Testament. The romance there suggests either God and Israel or Jesus and His Church. Such a wonderful reunion. Read the third chapter of the Prophet Zephaniah. It is Heaven. more »

But poetry most frequently is succinct? One must not go on after finishing. I realize that there is joy in slapping words down, unusual words, but…

The Elizabethan slant to the language is interesting. The mystical appearances are consistent with the silly imaginings of fear. Wasted adrenaline. Neglected giving of thanks for past rescues and guidance. Fozia, I like this piece very much…Douglas Blair more »

If you can be thankful for moments with redeeming value, you can skirt around the lonely parts. Happier with self, with others, with God… Douglas Blair.

Speaks powerfully of disappointment. The heart’s undulations…Douglas Blair.

Bible says you are worth the patience, humiliation and blood of God. Got your interest? Pick up those chips. They are on the table. Waiting…Douglas Blair…http://pastursgreen3.blogspot.com/

The fresh adventure of new paths (thus far sounds like Robert Frost). But then the caution of heeding the old grey beard gone before. Probably not corny, outdated or too moderate. Give him a try Adventurer. Good stuff Roberto. more »

Emily Dickinson was that spinster poet who remained undiscovered for years. Brilliant pieces. derived from the point of view of a young woman thinking outside of family, treasuring encounters in nature, experiencing suffering and thoughts of death without the cushion of Gospel Grace. She has some concoctions of hope for afterlife cooked in her own kettle. I possessed an anthology and read it a lot. Ultimately I discarded it, yeah discarded it, because of the aforementioned irritation. Right now I can hear the gasps of hundreds of aspiring female writers, progressive as they see themselves…Doug Blair more »

This poem about the frightening essay for class seems like a random impromptu encounter, given some enticing choices of words. By a relaxed storyteller. I like it all but at first reading I felt some awkwardness about my ignorance regarding that Australian poet and the way he writes. Four stars…Doug Blair, Kitchener, Canada. more »

Excellent provocation here. Perseverance. Objectives seemingly larger than known. Respecting the part of Providence. Venturing like Doctor Livingstone.

This poem on the pawn is very good. Lots of images. Underlying message that the poor for the silly issues and greed and power llust of the rich. They find themselves in the muck of the trenches and human intrigue. more »

The poem is heavy with loss. Offering no way out. Good for desired effect, I am sure. But let your next two poems be about solutions and victory. I have often suspected that much of today’s poetry is naysaying. King David as a poet in the Psalms canvassed all of the emotions and needs. And did so straight from the viscera. God liked such oraying. more »

Structured stanzas. I like that when addressing the effort to remember a person and a time so special. Structured? Aren’t they as likely to come out of left field in an unexpected but arresting way. Congrats on your contest recognition, Gina. more »

Pepped me up all through the month of December. Joined the forum. Entered two submissions to the Contest. Submitted 81 poems on all sorts of topics; faith, nature, community, personal milestones, the many influences of music.

http://puffnchord7.blogspot.com. Thanks very much more »

Excellent. The gatherings of one’s sense of identity. Upright. Thankful. Assured.

We may see online a number of hip prophets declaring a new season blabbity blah. Tickling ears. We must be like the Bereans. They were a delight to paul. Checking everything against the litmus of scripture.

This poem is excellent. The ending terms of note are sun…shield…grace…glory.
They recap the entire canon of scripture (creation and galaxy; protecting and guiding a chosen race of people; the outworking of Redemption through Jesus; our blissful destination in Revelation’s Zion. In Zephaniah’s chapter three.) I note Sir that we were both born in 1951. more »

This British imaginer wrote often of the Sea and its allure. Consider his long narrative poem Dauber. Tells the story of a young and venturesome artist who signs on to a sailing ship to gather moods and images for his craft. Gaining strength, friends and manliness. more »

Fun to give it a whirl.