My Angel (A Poetic Narrative) (Written from a young girl's view point)



I remember that one fateful day:
The rain was pouring down; Streets were wet with tears; I looked into your face;

Just a short time before,
I had been in my car with my friends; We had just graduated; Sunshine and life were everywhere;

We were laughing,
And having a good time; Then, all at once, Everything disappeared;

I was there,
Lying on the ground; Looking into your face; Your hand touching me;

It was dark, though midday;
There were people running all around; Someone was screaming; I heard it, it was my friend;

I strained to move,
To go to her side, to comfort her; But the weight of my body, Made me feel like I was pinned down;

I touched my head;
My hand came back red; Blood was everywhere; I felt sick to my stomach;

And then, there you were;
I could barely see you; My eyesight was blurred; You touched me;

You said, everything would be alright;
Then I felt something; Something heavy on me; It made me feel warm;

In the midst of my cold;
In the midst of my dizziness; In the midst of the street; It made me feel warm; I laid there for a long time;

For what seemed like forever,
You stayed with me; You talked to me;

You made me feel better;
In the midst of everything; You made me feel better; I couldn't see your face;

Just an outline of you;
As they put me in the ambulance; I wanted to thank you; But you were gone;

Then I was inside;
 The doctors and nurses; Everyone there helping; Making me feel better;

I asked about you;
Nobody knew; I searched my memory; My blood-soaked, tear stained memory;

You were gone.

Font size:
Collection  PDF     
 

Submitted on May 19, 2017

Modified on April 26, 2023

1:27 min read
27

Quick analysis:

Scheme AB XC XX CD AX XX XX ED XX XX ED EB FG XE FD G
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,502
Words 291
Stanzas 16
Stanza Lengths 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 1

Donald Loudon

I started to write because of the great feeling of release, and being able to do something of my own that I enjoyed. Since then, writing has become a way of life for me, and I enjoy it thoroughly. I write about things I feel strongly and or know a lot about. more…

All Donald Loudon poems | Donald Loudon Books

0 fans

Discuss the poem My Angel (A Poetic Narrative) (Written from a young girl's view point) with the community...

0 Comments

    Translation

    Find a translation for this poem in other languages:

    Select another language:

    • - Select -
    • 简体中文 (Chinese - Simplified)
    • 繁體中文 (Chinese - Traditional)
    • Español (Spanish)
    • Esperanto (Esperanto)
    • 日本語 (Japanese)
    • Português (Portuguese)
    • Deutsch (German)
    • العربية (Arabic)
    • Français (French)
    • Русский (Russian)
    • ಕನ್ನಡ (Kannada)
    • 한국어 (Korean)
    • עברית (Hebrew)
    • Gaeilge (Irish)
    • Українська (Ukrainian)
    • اردو (Urdu)
    • Magyar (Hungarian)
    • मानक हिन्दी (Hindi)
    • Indonesia (Indonesian)
    • Italiano (Italian)
    • தமிழ் (Tamil)
    • Türkçe (Turkish)
    • తెలుగు (Telugu)
    • ภาษาไทย (Thai)
    • Tiếng Việt (Vietnamese)
    • Čeština (Czech)
    • Polski (Polish)
    • Bahasa Indonesia (Indonesian)
    • Românește (Romanian)
    • Nederlands (Dutch)
    • Ελληνικά (Greek)
    • Latinum (Latin)
    • Svenska (Swedish)
    • Dansk (Danish)
    • Suomi (Finnish)
    • فارسی (Persian)
    • ייִדיש (Yiddish)
    • հայերեն (Armenian)
    • Norsk (Norwegian)
    • English (English)

    Citation

    Use the citation below to add this poem to your bibliography:

    Style:MLAChicagoAPA

    "My Angel (A Poetic Narrative) (Written from a young girl's view point)" Poetry.com. STANDS4 LLC, 2024. Web. 28 Mar. 2024. <https://www.poetry.com/poem/79095/my-angel-(a-poetic-narrative)-(written-from-a-young-girl's-view-point)>.

    Become a member!

    Join our community of poets and poetry lovers to share your work and offer feedback and encouragement to writers all over the world!

    March 2024

    Poetry Contest

    Join our monthly contest for an opportunity to win cash prizes and attain global acclaim for your talent.
    3
    days
    11
    hours
    55
    minutes

    Special Program

    Earn Rewards!

    Unlock exciting rewards such as a free mug and free contest pass by commenting on fellow members' poems today!

    Browse Poetry.com

    Quiz

    Are you a poetry master?

    »
    Who wrote a famed poem about the Crimean War?
    A Oscar Wilde
    B Alfred Douglas
    C Alfred Lord Tennyson
    D Alfred E. Neuman