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Starlight In My Eyes

Susan Mayer Brumel

           Starlight

     How heavy is a star
     Lifted from the sky?

Heaven’s where you are,
And where I’m going to fly
     
     To take you from that place,
     Bring you home with me

And look upon the face
That I was meant to see…
     
     But life is too unkind
     To grant me such a prize —

Starlight made me blind,
When I gazed into your eyes

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Some things are not meant to be.

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Written on February 12, 2025

Submitted by susan.brumel on February 19, 2025

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AB AB CD CD EF EF
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 372
Words 76
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 2, 2, 2, 2, 2, 2
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Susan Mayer Brumel

A few years ago, I retired from a thirty-five year career in hospice counseling, at which time I began writing poetry. My poems are influenced by my patients’ journeys, the compelling beauty of nature, and the human condition. A lover of all animals and most people, I enjoy spending time in nature, long walks, and reading Pablo Neruda, Blake, William Carlos Williams, James Joyce, Mary Oliver, Emily Dickinson, Maya Angelou, Leonard Cohen, and more. Baudelaire tells us to ‘be drunk’ on something every day; I am drunk on poetry and intend never to be sober! more…

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10 Comments
  • Giselavigil
    Giselavigil
    I can relate Susan. Beautifully written as always.
    LikeReply 117 days ago
  • yelskwah
    yelskwah
    "Starlight" is a beautifully concise and emotionally charged poem that resonates with a deep sense of longing and a touch of melancholy. You've packed a universe of feelings into just a few lines, which is a testament to your ability to use simple language to create profound effects. 
    LikeReply 117 days ago
    • susan.brumel
      susan.brumel
      Thank you, Joel. I’m so happy that the poem resonated with you. :-)
      LikeReply17 days ago
  • BellaTheMilkCarton
    BellaTheMilkCarton
    lovely
    LikeReply 124 days ago
  • susan.brumel
    susan.brumel
    Thank you very much- I’m so glad you enjoyed it. :^)
    LikeReply 125 days ago
  • rickscorpio
    rickscorpio
    Powerful tale, short and to the point. LOVE IT!
    LikeReply 125 days ago
  • yelskwah
    yelskwah
    "Starlight In My Eyes" is a thoughtfully crafted poem that touches on significant themes of love, loss, and longing. You've done well to explore these emotions with sensitivity, making it a work that resonates deeply. The use of starlight as imagery throughout the poem adds a layer of wonder and highlights the beauty and mystery inherent in love. This piece showcases your talent for evoking strong feelings, and I appreciate the effort and skill that went into it. Keep up the great work! 
    LikeReply 125 days ago
    • susan.brumel
      susan.brumel
      Thank you so much. I always enjoy and appreciate your thoughtful comments.
      LikeReply25 days ago
  • mark.e.s
    mark.e.s
    So Beautiful, my eyes welled up.
    LikeReply 125 days ago
    • susan.brumel
      susan.brumel
      Thank you, Mark. I appreciate your kind words.
      LikeReply 125 days ago
  • @Lbfisher
    @Lbfisher
    Romantic, melancholic, and simply beautiful. This suggests an emotional distance that feels insurmountable. Such longing and desire! Devotion. Very lyrical too. It could be a song.
    LikeReply 125 days ago
    • susan.brumel
      susan.brumel
      Thank you, my friend. Your interpretation of this poem is scarily astute. Thank you for reading and commenting. :-)
      LikeReply 125 days ago
    • @Lbfisher
      @Lbfisher
      would you allow me to turn it into a song? I have been humming this melody in my head since I read your poem. I’d need to include a few lines for verse and bridge meter so i’d basically co-write it with you. Would you give me permission? 
      LikeReply 125 days ago
    • susan.brumel
      susan.brumel
      I need to tell you that I sense a song in it too, and my friend Steve does also. I’d be thrilled for you to set it to music! Exciting!
      LikeReply 125 days ago
    • @Lbfisher
      @Lbfisher
      Thank you! Working on it! Super excited!
      LikeReply 125 days ago
    • susan.brumel
      susan.brumel
      Me too, my new uber talented friend :-)
      LikeReply 125 days ago
  • rameshs.88917
    rameshs.88917
    Wow charming lines on the romantic or aspirational outlook of thine life. Searching for possibility in impossible things reflects Poetess' excited, strong will power to achieve something new discovery in life. I like the metaphor life is too unkind and natural imageries to express thine aspiring mind.
    The way regular rhyming scheme and trimeters syllables are given appropriately placement are reflects the maturity of the renowned feminist poetess.
    I added a bold lines from the Novel ' The Old Man In The Sea' by Earnest Hemingway to highlight thine optimistic stanzas:
    " A man be destroyed,but no to be defeated."     
    LikeReply25 days ago
  • philmaund
    philmaund
    How poignant!
    LikeReply 125 days ago
    • susan.brumel
      susan.brumel
      Thank you, for reading and commenting, my friend.
      LikeReply 125 days ago

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