What Flowers for Teardrops

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  ladyygracious

  Beautiful

  LikeReply 117 days ago
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  dburriskitchen

  I love this!! I wish I could say so much with only a few words.

  LikeReply 11 month ago
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    mark.e.s

    u just did!

    LikeReply 11 month ago
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  susan.brumel

  Sad.

  LikeReply 11 month ago
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    mark.e.s

    there's more to it

    LikeReply1 month ago
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    susan.brumel

    Yes, but the story of Icarus is not a happy one.

    LikeReply 11 month ago
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    mark.e.s

    This is a twist with a hidden surprise ending.

    LikeReply1 month ago
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  mark.e.s

  Expansion & Exposition leading to glowing Nothingness.

  LikeReply 11 month ago
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  AIDA

  Wow! Your poem "What Flowers for Teardrops" captures such a poignant and ethereal sense of loss and transformation. The imagery of flying and the melting wings is both striking and emotional, creating a powerful visual of vulnerability and the bittersweet nature of change. The contrast between flight and falling (the "tear dropped") deepens the impact, inviting the reader to reflect on their own experiences of loss and renewal.
  
  The use of formatting, particularly the center alignment and the stylistic choices with symbols, adds a unique aesthetic quality that complements the theme of your piece. The questioning line “who am i” is a compelling conclusion that resonates deeply, leaving the reader pondering their own identity in the face of loss.
  
  Improvement Suggestions:
  
  1. Expand on Imagery:
  While the imagery is beautiful, you might consider adding more sensory details to enhance the emotional connection. For example, what does the daybreak feel like? Incorporating sounds, tastes, or scents could deepen the immersion into the experience.
  
  2. Clarity and Structure:
  The poem has a lovely flow, but you might think about adding a bit more structure or rhythm. This could help emphasize key emotional moments and guide the reader through the experience more smoothly.
  
  3. Explore the Title:
  The title, "What Flowers for Teardrops," suggests a metaphorical inquiry. Consider weaving in the flower imagery throughout the poem, perhaps as symbols of growth or healing, to tie the concept together more cohesively.
  
  4. Consider Expanding the Narrative:
  If you feel comfortable, you might explore the journey further—what led to losing the wings? Are there specific memories or experiences tied to the teardrops? This could add depth to the emotional landscape of the piece.
  
  Overall, you have a thought-provoking and beautifully expressive poem! Keep writing and experimenting with your craft. I can’t wait to see how you choose to expand on these themes in future works! more »

  LikeReply 11 month ago