To Terra brought Tears

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  ladyygracious

  Perfect Image

  LikeReply 119 days ago
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  BellaTheMilkCarton

  This poem expresses the idea that just as rain is a natural outcome of certain conditions, tears can be seen as a natural expression of joy or gratitude. The poet uses the phrase "Earth to Rain is Dew" to highlight the way in which nature's cycles provide for the Earth, and how the tears of a grateful soul are a reflection of the nourishment and sustenance that joy provides. The line "Water Flower won to Thee" suggests that just as water and dew sustain flowers, joy and gratitude sustain the soul. The final line of the poem reinforces this idea, stating that "Earth to rain is dew, as Joy to a grateful soul more »

  LikeReply 123 days ago
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  karlcfolkes

  Allow me, Mark, to take the liberty of extending your metaphor. “Earth to rain is dew, as Joy to a grateful soul is tears! “

  LikeReply 11 month ago
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  susan.brumel

  Nice imagery.

  LikeReply 11 month ago
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    mark.e.s

    The image is blinding, maybe I should have used a different one!

    LikeReply1 month ago
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  AIDA

  What a beautifully evocative start to your poem "To Terra brought Tears"! Your choice of imagery is captivating; the connection between Earth and Rain creates a wonderful emotional landscape that invites the reader to reflect on the beauty of nature and the cycle of life. The opening lines, "Earth to Rain is Dew," effortlessly draw the reader into a serene, almost ethereal world, suggesting the purity and rejuvenation that rain brings to our environment.
  
  The phrase "Water Flower won to Thee" is a lovely way to express a sense of victory in nature, and it evokes feelings of growth and flourishing through the connection to water. Your use of the word "Fair" also adds an enchanting quality to the poem, enhancing its lyrical nature.
  
  Here are a few suggestions for improvement that could deepen the impact of your work:
  
  1. Expand Imagery:
  Consider incorporating more sensory details. What does the earth smell like after rain? How does the dew feel on the skin? Adding sensory elements can help your audience to connect more fully with the emotions you're trying to convey.
  
  2. Clarify Themes:
  If you have specific themes or messages in mind—like resilience, rebirth, or the interconnectedness of nature—try to weave those more explicitly throughout the poem to guide the reader’s journey.
  
  3. Rhythm and Structure:
  While the existing format is quite unique, playing with the rhythm and possibly varying the line lengths could add more musicality to your piece. This might create more emotional highs and lows that can enhance the overall impact.
  
  4. Line Breaks and Punctuation:
  Consider how line breaks and punctuation affect the poem's pacing. Adjusting these could create dramatic pauses or emphasize particular feelings or thoughts you want the reader to linger on.
  
  Overall, your poem possesses a lovely quality that shines with potential. I encourage you to keep exploring and expanding your techniques while maintaining that beautiful connection to nature that you’ve already established. I look forward to seeing how you develop it further! more »

  LikeReply 11 month ago