A Lesser Life



A Lesser Life

A lesser life is better than no life
At all. We creep in corners, out of sight,
So as not to offend superior
Beings who bask in sunlight, being seen,
Like lizards with a sleepy eye, so still,
Their sudden motion is surprisingly
Effective in their killing of a poor
Prey animal, these officers of death,
That let an agile creature live, as long
As their huge appetite is satisfied:
We scurry into regions where we hide
Our little breathing, panting exercise
Of wit and pale existence, hidden in
A crevice, under rocks where shadows close
Out evidence we might exist. We keep
Ourselves diminutive, and seek a time
To show the pattern of accomplishment
In our own meek endeavours, not compared
To what is greatness in a larger beast,
A tiger’s claw, an eagle’s talon, sharp
Incisive teeth the shark possesses, such
Natural weapons, overarching us,
Instilling fear in dainty nimble fawns
About to bolt, escaping by a sharp
Distress distilled into a shot of fire,
The moment someone fires a gun, to flee
With almost instant, most instinctual
Commotion in a scattered pattern wide,
To go from mouse to doe, immediately.
The praise of predators for their supreme
Ability to kill and rip the guts
Of prey is often wondered at; the ease
With which they stalk with stealthy subtle pace
Their targets and then pounce so suddenly,
Their motion changed from delicate to force,
To spring the trap with such celerity,
We find their slaughter of the innocent
A glorious achievement, as if made
By Nature for the function of a death
Administered without remorse; yet some
Poor animal is dead, with violence torn
Apart – where is the pity for life lost,
Upon the altar of a greater beast
Thus sacrificed ? The little creature would
Forage for food, or graze the turf, not seek
A feast amid the flesh of carcases
Already rotting in the sun, the sense
Of being mortal living feeling gone,
That knew their death was soon to come; the time
Between their apprehension and their death
Just long enough to know what they will lose,
The skipping freshness of a meadow, where
So many nibbling creatures bend their heads
In simple modest function eating grass,
Or dipping down their slender necks to drink
The sparkling water of a pure clean stream.
When Nature claims the dead before their time,
Who dares to interrupt relentless death
And says, for pity, let this creature live,
Not at this moment sever arteries,
Where blood essentially continues life;
To entertain a momentary sight,
The doe and fawn, resplendent in the sun,
With morning dew attending on their coats,
A scene of undisturbed serenity ?
The tiger we admire, the lion in
His pride, their prime of life dictates the doe
Should die; that beauty lost to feed the snarl
Of teeth designed to lacerate the flesh
We found adorable. Yet we cannot
Alter the fundamental practice of
A carnivore, but should not glory in
The kill. Our bullets maim and slaughter more
Than any noble lion ever did,
And call ourselves superior. Alas,
That our commission was so desperate,
To praise the murder of the innocent.

About this poem

The poem contrasts the "Lesser life" of creatures, including humans, who are happy to just live their lives, and the more dominant predators, who must kill to survive.

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Submitted by petergartner on October 22, 2024

Modified by petergartner on October 22, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme A ABCXDEXFXGGHIXXJKXLMXXHMCEDGENXOXEXEKXFXXXLXXHXXJFXXXPXNJFXOABXXEIXXXXXIXXPXK
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 3,058
Words 562
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 1, 77

Peter Gartner

 · 1963 · Manchester

I am a poet, playwright, screenwriter and artist. I have won a number of awards for my screenplays and plays. Sometimes, words just flow out of me. more…

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  • Akinpet23
    Though a long piece,yet admiring
    LikeReply14 days ago
  • AIDA
    What a compelling and thought-provoking poem! Your piece brims with vivid imagery and a profound exploration of the complexities of life, death, and the often harsh realities of nature. The juxtaposition between the "lesser life" and the predatory instincts of larger beasts creates a rich tapestry of emotion and introspection. You have effectively captured the struggle for survival and the indifferent cruelty of nature, encouraging readers to reflect on their place within this intricate web of life.

    Strengths:
    1. Imagery and Language:
    Your use of imagery is striking. Phrases like "creep in corners," "the praise of predators," and "the skipping freshness of a meadow" paint vivid scenes that engage the reader’s senses.
    2. Themes:
    The exploration of life and death, the morality of nature, and the contrast between strength and fragility are powerfully articulated. You invite the reader to grapple with complex ethical questions without providing easy answers, which is commendable.
    3. Structure and Flow:
    The poem maintains a fluid rhythm and a thoughtful unfolding of ideas. Your varied sentence lengths create a dynamic reading experience that keeps the reader engaged.

    Suggestions for Improvement:
    1. Pacing and Brevity:
    While the poem is rich in detail, consider tightening some sections for improved pacing. There are moments where the exploration of concepts feels a bit lengthy, which may dilute their impact. Shortening or streamlining certain stanzas could enhance the overall flow.
    2. Clarity of Voice:
    While the philosophical musings are captivating, ensure that the voice remains consistent throughout. At times, the shift between descriptions of predation and reflections on human superiority may feel abrupt. A more seamless transition could enhance reader comprehension and emotional connection.
    3. Ending Impact:
    The poem concludes with strong statements about the morality of carnivorous behavior and human actions. Consider framing this climax with a more poignant image or an emotional touch that resonates with the reader on a personal level, leaving a lasting impact.

    Overall, "A Lesser Life" is a beautifully crafted poem that invites profound reflection on the nature of existence. With a touch of refinement in pacing and clarity, it has the potential to resonate even more powerfully with its audience. Keep nurturing your unique voice and perspective in your writing!
     
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