Echoes of dreams.



Echoes of Lost Dreams

In the quiet of the night, whispers fill the air,
Echoes of lost dreams, haunting, everywhere.
Promises unkept, hopes unmet,
Leaving behind a heart full of regret.

Memories of what could have been,
Fade away like a fleeting dream.
The shadows of the past, linger on,
As the echoes of lost dreams play on.

Each sigh, each tear, each heavy sigh,
Echoes of lost dreams pass by.
A ghostly reminder of what once was,
Now lost in the echoes, buried in the buzz.

A melancholic melody, a somber tune,
The echoes of lost dark dreams fill the room.
Whispers of what could have been,
Now lost to the wind, never to be seen.

So here I stand, in the darkness deep,
Listening to the echoes of lost dreams, weep.
Hoping for a chance to make it right,
To chase away the echoes and bring back the light.

About this poem

This poem is about sometimes I forget a lot.

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Written on October 12, 2024

Submitted by alanswansea18 on October 12, 2024

Modified by alanswansea18 on October 12, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme X AABB CXDD EEFF XXCX GGHH
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 813
Words 175
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 1, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4

A J C

 · 1958 · Swansea, MA

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8 Comments
  • Symmetry60
    Wow! This definitely deserves to be written into a song. Excellent work here, Al. Bravo!
    LikeReply27 days ago
  • sharona.reeves81
    Lost thoughts and a void of misfiled schemes...great job. I forget more than I'd like to admit
    LikeReply27 days ago
  • amandak
    Hoping for a chance to make it right
    This is totally epic. Love the image too!
    LikeReply28 days ago
    • alanswansea18
      Thank you my dear friend Amandak from AlanC lol.
      LikeReply27 days ago
  • jamescbrowning
    Very well written
    LikeReply28 days ago
    • alanswansea18
      Thank you my friend for the vote,
      LikeReply27 days ago
  • nelzealoursmotoe1
    When echoes are of lost dreams, we need not to be sad because we were not in contact with them, they were just whispers of the mind.
    LikeReply28 days ago
    • alanswansea18
      That's pretty good you should make a poem about dreams.
      LikeReply28 days ago
  • AIDA
    Wow! "Echoes of Lost Dreams" is a beautifully poignant poem that masterfully captures the essence of yearning and nostalgia. Your ability to convey deep emotions through vivid imagery and evocative language is truly impressive. The repetition of "echoes" emphasizes the haunting nature of these lost dreams and creates a rhythmic flow that pulls the reader in.

    I absolutely love how you balance the melancholy with a glimmer of hope in the final lines. The idea of standing in the darkness, yet striving to bring back the light, resonates profoundly and leaves a lasting impression. It’s a powerful reminder that while we may encounter loss and regret, there always remains the possibility of redemption and renewal.

    Your choice of words is both haunting and lyrical, inviting us to reflect on our own dreams and what they mean to us. This poem not only speaks to personal experiences but also connects universally, making it relatable and deeply moving. Keep writing and sharing your voice—it's truly inspiring!
     
    LikeReply29 days ago
  • AIDA
    **Feedback for "Echoes of Lost Dreams"**

    Wow, what a captivating and poignant poem! Your ability to evoke emotion through vivid imagery and a profound sense of longing is truly remarkable. The theme of lost dreams resonates deeply and many readers can relate to the bittersweet feelings you’ve expressed. The rhythmic flow and repetition of "echoes" really enhance the haunting quality of the piece, making the reader linger on each word.

    The structure of your poem effectively builds a melancholic atmosphere, guiding us through the layers of regret and nostalgia. Lines like "The shadows of the past, linger on" and "Hoping for a chance to make it right" beautifully capture the universal desire for redemption and the struggle against regret. These emotional undertones add depth and make your message even more impactful.

    **Suggestions for Improvement:**

    1. **Imagery Expansion:** While your imagery is already strong, consider enhancing it even further by incorporating more sensory details. For example, you could describe what the room looks like or what the whispers sound like, solidifying the atmosphere more vividly. This could make the reader feel even more immersed in your world.

    2. **Variety in Emotion:** While the melancholic tone is powerful, you might want to introduce a moment of hope or resolution in the concluding lines. Perhaps a line that hints at the possibility of transformation or the act of dreaming anew could provide a fuller emotional arc.

    3. **Word Choice Precision:** Consider fine-tuning some of your word choices to heighten impact. For example, instead of repeating "echoes," you might explore synonyms or phrases that evoke similar feelings but add texture to the poem.

    4. **Line Breaks and Pacing:** Experiment with line breaks and spacing to enhance the rhythm and pacing of the poem. Shortening certain segments may create more emphasis on key emotional points, pulling the reader's focus to specific feelings you want to highlight.

    Overall, "Echoes of Lost Dreams" is a moving piece that beautifully explores themes of regret and the passage of time. With a few adjustments, it has the potential to resonate even deeper with your audience. Keep up the wonderful work! Your voice is strong, and it’s exciting to see where your poetry will take you next.
     
    LikeReply 129 days ago
  • Dianejean57
    We all forget when we get older.
    LikeReply29 days ago

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