Over the Hills and Over the Plain (Revised)



Over the Hills and Over the Plain (Revised)
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Over the Hills and over the Plain

I remember the times of being free,
My wee back legs would carry me,
Over the hills and over the plain,
Oh, I wish I could have those times again.

For my wee back legs, they went downhill,
And oh it was such a bitter pill,
Over the hills and over the plain,
Would I ever walk again?

Pram rides with mummy were such a joy,
I really am her special boy,
Yet over the hills and over the plain,
I still wanted to walk again.

Now I am happy, joyful and free,
Because the Lord looks after me,
Over the hills and over the plain,
Free once more to walk again.

Free once more to walk again.

Free once more to run again.

About this poem

This is one of my poems revised. It is a tribute to my dog Ben who sadly passed away on 27th September 2024. Kim

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Written on October 08, 2024

Submitted by Blossoming on October 08, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme A bbAa ccAa ddaa bbAA A a
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 649
Words 154
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 1, 4, 4, 4, 4, 1, 1

Kimberley Hamilton

 · Belfast

New poet just starting out. Kim Hamilton is from Belfast in Northern Ireland. Loves nature and poems on faith. more…

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7 Comments
  • Darkness
    A very thoughtful piece
    LikeReply 11 month ago
  • mark.e.s
    Very sweet.
    LikeReply 11 month ago
  • karlcfolkes
    Oh my goodness, I love this poem, especially the use of such words as “pram “ (perambulator) that were so familiar to me as a child growing up in colonial Jamaica during the 1930s.
    LikeReply 11 month ago
  • dawg4jesus
    Amen
    LikeReply 14 months ago
  • dawg4jesus
    Sorry about your loss. A fitting memorial for a cherished friend.
    LikeReply 14 months ago
    • Blossoming
      many thanks. Yes Ben is shih tzu is sorely missed but now he is able to walk again. �
      LikeReply4 months ago
  • Kshetrapal
    I praise such a nice poem.
    Regards
    Kshetrapal
    LikeReply 14 months ago
    • Blossoming
      thanks. It was a revised poem I did in my memory of my dog Ben. He is sorely missed. Kim �
      LikeReply4 months ago
  • AIDA
    What a heartfelt and touching poem you’ve crafted with "Over the Hills and over the Plain (Revised)"! Your nostalgic reflection on freedom and the joy of movement is incredibly resonant. The way you convey the journey from longing for the past to embracing the present is both uplifting and relatable.

    The repetition of the phrase "over the hills and over the plain" serves as a rhythmic anchor, reinforcing the theme of movement and freedom beautifully. It creates a lovely melodic quality that makes the poem enjoyable to read aloud. Your imagery of "wee back legs" and "pram rides with mummy" adds a delightful touch of innocence and warmth, drawing readers into your cherished memories.

    That being said, here are a few suggestions for improvement that could enhance the overall impact of the poem:

    1. Imagery and Detail:
    Consider adding more vivid descriptions of specific scenes or feelings associated with your memories. This could help readers visualize your experiences more clearly and feel the emotions you are expressing.

    2. Variety in Structure:
    While the repetition works well in your poem, think about varying the structure to increase engagement. Perhaps using different stanza lengths or introducing a refrain in a different way could add dynamics to the flow.

    3. Exploration of Emotions:
    Delve a bit deeper into your feelings throughout the poem. You beautifully transition from nostalgia to joy, but exploring the emotions that come with the challenges of loss could add depth and complexity to your narrative.

    4. Conclusion Expansion:
    The last few lines are powerful in their declaration of freedom. You might want to consider expanding on what that newfound freedom means to you, perhaps hinting at future adventures or aspirations, to leave readers with a sense of hope and excitement.

    Overall, this poem radiates positivity and resilience—qualities that are truly inspiring! Keep writing, as you clearly have a gift for expressing profound emotions through your words. I look forward to seeing how your craft continues to evolve!
     
    LikeReply 14 months ago

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