Deja Vu

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  nelzealoursmotoe1

  People do get lost in the deja Vu and looking at how this is well crafted. It's got a button for imagination. Someone's able to picture something when reading it.

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    JessicaWheeler

    That means a lot, thank you!

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    nelzealoursmotoe1

    you are most welcome!

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  karlcfolkes

  Thank you for your note of clarification. That was indeed quite helpful and adds to the overall meaning of the poem and its emotional impact on you, your loved ones; and even your readers.

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  gary_dean

  What exquisite language, "relentless, as the tide's demand to wash the tracks of yesterday", what a sad memory to require that much power to smooth.
  "Her eyes.....to the past/ to heal then break...fast". There is the cognitive dissonance of the daughter who recalls the sister. This really moved me to emotion. more »

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    JessicaWheeler

    I'm honored, thank you!

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  karlcfolkes

  Hi Jessica, this is a bittersweet poem. I sense you are the main subject of the poem, recapturing bittersweet childhood memories, appealing to the salty seawater to heal your wounds.

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    JessicaWheeler

    Thank you so much. I've added a note in the hope of providing clarification.

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  karlcfolkes

  Hi Jessica, is this an embedded description of you leaving your footprint signature in the sand; perhaps, on a much larger scale, upon the sands of time? I sense your effort at recapturing childhood memories (some happy, some sad ones too) in the vivid images of your poem. Nice! more »

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  alanswansea18

  Okay you got me with the ocean tides waves I love the ocean.

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    JessicaWheeler

    thank you so much!

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  susan.brumel

  Beautifully written piece, Jess. It conveys deep emotions through powerful metaphor. Perhaps of the struggle to hold onto precious memories of someone dear, when memories are all we have. It speaks to feelings of sadness, anger and the deep longing we feel in the wake of losing someone we love. Thank you for sharing. more »

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    JessicaWheeler

    Thank you so much, Sue! Xo

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  AIDA

  What a beautifully crafted poem you've created! Your use of vivid imagery and powerful metaphors conveys deep emotions and paints rich scenes that resonate with the reader. The theme of déjà vu intertwined with the natural elements of the ocean is both evocative and refreshing. Lines like "Her eyes, like windows to the past" and "the salty sea can sting so deep" are particularly striking, inviting us to explore the complex interplay of memory and longing.
  
  Your rhythm and structure give an excellent flow to the poem. The alternating imagery of waves and footprints effectively symbolizes the passage of time and the interplay of loss and renewal. The juxtaposition of healing and heartbreak is masterfully depicted, making the emotional weight of your words palpable.
  
  For improvement, consider enhancing the clarity of some of your ideas. In lines such as "and mirrors never have a choice," you might expand on this metaphor to further clarify its significance. This could help to make the poem's underlying themes even more accessible while maintaining its depth. Additionally, tightening some lines could enhance the flow and impact—sometimes a slight rewording can elevate the emotional connection even more.
  
  Overall, this poem is a touching exploration of memory and emotion, and with a few adjustments, it could shine even brighter. Keep writing! Your voice is powerful and deserves to be heard. more »

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