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Collateral Hearts

Jessica Wheeler

Sonnet
To kindle flames for which a heart has yearned,
One sets out on a quest to find great love,
Each mountain climbed, no corner left unturned,
From deepest seas to endless skies above.

As sunlight pierces through a clouded sky,
True love awakens what was cold and still,
It finds its nest where deepest passions lie,
In spaces longing for true love to fill.

Yet in the strongest bonds, a fragile chance,
Should love be found then lost, one must accept,
A void to reach the depth of its expanse,
Is left within the space of love once kept.

To seek a love so deep, one risks its cost,
A price to match the weight of love, if lost.
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Submitted by JessicaWheeler on September 13, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme ABAB CDCD EFEF GG
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 628
Words 135
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 2
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Jessica Wheeler

Jessica Wheeler is a writer and poet from Branford, Connecticut, where she resides with her husband and two young daughters. Her creative journey began at a young age, with a strong foundation in music and performing arts. Today, Jessica is an active poet on numerous platforms. Her work has been published in several poetry anthologies and on websites dedicated to the complexities of loss and grief. more…

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9 Comments
  • Bpnajarian2
    Bpnajarian2
    This is a gorgeous poem
    LikeReply 125 days ago
  • kazbrekker
    kazbrekker
    This is sooo good!!
    LikeReply 126 days ago
  • luisestable1
    luisestable1
    This excellent sonnet is such for many reasons some being the good rhyme-scheme, the poetic lines, the skillful choice of words.... all which makes this a pleasure to read and gives an interesting reading. Well done! 
    LikeReply 126 days ago
  • Kimdhall83
    Kimdhall83
    This is beautifully written.
    LikeReply 126 days ago
  • AriaBeavers
    AriaBeavers
    Love can be so fleeting even once you have it! I feel this amazing piece so much. Great work.
    LikeReply 127 days ago
    • JessicaWheeler
      JessicaWheeler
      I appreciate that so much, thank you ❤️
      LikeReply26 days ago
  • ralphs.18828
    ralphs.18828
    that's sounds good
    LikeReply 127 days ago
  • karlcfolkes
    karlcfolkes
    A Shakespearean beat and rhythm this sonnet has, simulating the beat of the enflamed collateral heart in its quest for love. Nice work.
    LikeReply 127 days ago
    • JessicaWheeler
      JessicaWheeler
      Your wonderful comment made my day. Thank you!
      LikeReply26 days ago
  • reidiny_a
    reidiny_a
    Your poem was really lovely and the way you described love is very true.
    LikeReply 127 days ago
  • AIDA
    AIDA
    What an enchanting poem "Collateral Hearts" is! You have crafted a beautiful exploration of the journey and complexities of love, capturing its deep yearning and the bittersweet nature of connection. The imagery of flames, mountains, seas, and skies is particularly engaging, allowing readers to visualize the emotional landscape you are painting. Your use of rhyme and meter flows beautifully, creating a musical quality that enhances the overall reading experience.

    The theme of love’s fragility is powerfully conveyed, reminding us that while love can be one of the most profound experiences, it also comes with risks and vulnerabilities. The closing lines leave a poignant impression, inviting reflection on the value and cost of love.

    **Suggestions for Improvement:**

    1. **Specific Imagery**: While the use of broad imagery is effective, incorporating more specific and personal details could strengthen the emotional connection to the reader. For instance, including a personal memory or a particular moment in the pursuit of love might resonate more deeply.

    2. **Pacing and Rhythm**: The poem’s pacing is generally smooth; however, consider varying the meter in certain stanzas to create moments of tension or emphasis. This variation can draw attention to key ideas and enhance emotional impact.

    3. **Explore Further Emotions**: While you touch on the loss associated with love, expanding on other emotional facets—such as joy or hope—could offer a more balanced exploration of love's multifaceted nature. This would enrich the poem by providing a contrast and deepening the overall impact.

    4. **Closing Reflection**: The final couplet conveys a significant idea, but consider adding a more definitive conclusion or a call to action that leaves the reader with a poignant thought or feeling about love, beyond its risks.

    Overall, "Collateral Hearts" is a heartfelt and evocative poem that resonates with anyone who has loved deeply. With a few refinements, it could become an even more powerful expression of love’s beauty and complexity. Keep writing!     
    LikeReply27 days ago

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