An Unwanted Companion



An Unwanted Companion


I sit in the silence of the golden hour,
Heart in sync with its flickering light
Behind silver clouds a shy sun cowers,
Struggling to ward off the night

My eyes search for life in a world so still,
That the mind conjures movement not there
Perched high in a tree two nightingales trill,
A birdsong that no one can hear

A sadness imposes that sits by my side,
A companion I never did seek
It fills the void left behind when you died,
As memories fall soft on my cheek

About this poem

A friend asked me to write a poem about sadness. I found myself sitting in the silent stillness of the hour just before dawn, the golden hour, alone with my memories, except for an unwanted companion that sat down beside me.

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Written on August 11, 2024

Submitted by susan.brumel on August 11, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme X XAXA BXBX CDCD
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 494
Words 105
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 1, 4, 4, 4

Susan Mayer Brumel

A few years ago, I retired from a thirty-five year career in hospice counseling, at which time I began writing poetry. My poems are influenced by my patients’ journeys, the compelling beauty of nature, and the human condition. A lover of all animals and most people, I enjoy spending time in nature, long walks, and reading Pablo Neruda, Blake, William Carlos Williams, James Joyce, Mary Oliver, Emily Dickinson, Maya Angelou, Leonard Cohen, and more. Baudelaire tells us to ‘be drunk’ on something every day; I am drunk on poetry and intend never to be sober! more…

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17 Comments
  • ronan.collins.89
    Beautifully sad
    LikeReply7 days ago
  • gary_dean
    This poem stays true to it's melancholy to the end. "...a shy sun cowers..." my favorite line. The author moves us along quickly to the loss, undoubtably the source of the sadness that makes me fell damp wearied. A good write. 
    LikeReply 115 days ago
    • gary_dean
      My comment should read, " feel damp & wearied..." but I can't edit it.
      LikeReply15 days ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you for your thoughtful comments, Gary. A good friend of mine, a talented fellow poet here, challenged me to write a sadness poem. Actually felt ‘damp and wearied’ myself as I wrote it.!
      Glad you appreciated it as well. 
      LikeReply 115 days ago
    • susan.brumel
      Been there myself. Lol
      So frustrating!
      LikeReply 115 days ago
  • philmaund
    You say so much in so few words. You are not so much a poet, more of a wordconjurer! So impressive!
    LikeReply27 days ago
  • Dianejean57
    Amazing.
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you so much, Diane. I’m glad you like it. Thanks too, for favoriting my poet page. Your support means a lot to me
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • Woodsj
    Really a great poem from the heart, written so well, most people can relate.
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you so much. I’m happy you enjoyed it!
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • Adroity
    Great work! Congratulations
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you, Alex. I’m happy you enjoyed it. :-)
      LikeReply 12 months ago
  • jn.selvadurai
    What a thought! Short, concise and the master class. Thank you Susan.
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you very much for your kind words. I’m happy you enjoyed it.
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • JokerGem
    It is unfathomable you are not winning these contests --just gonna leave it at that...
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you so much. That is so sweet of you to say. I’m happy you enjoyed the poem!
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • Benny11
    Congrats!
    LikeReply 12 months ago
  • susanh.04604
    Contracts! In my opinion, yours should have been 1st!
    LikeReply 12 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you so much ! Happy you enjoyed it.
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • Davyreilly
    Well done to you Susan. Where do you get the inspiration from?
    LikeReply 13 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      That space behind my eyes, where the light shines most bright, and there is no distance between day and night…in my dreams I guess! Thank you for your kind words and support of my work. Much appreciated.
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • npirandy
    Well, Susie. I don't know what to say. You just keep banging the drum. You are truly a special talent.
    LikeReply 13 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you, Randy. Your kind words of encouragement are always appreciated.
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • Symmetry60
    Should be #1.
    LikeReply 13 months ago
  • marshaelewis
    I love this sweet, simple poem packed full of beautiful imagery we can all relate to. The cadence of the words match their beauty.
    LikeReply 13 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you again, Marsha. Your thoughtful words are most appreciated.
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • Symmetry60
    Beautiful poetry here. It says much in very few words. It makes the reader feel by drawing emotion as per the use of some very poignant words. This is poetry at its finest. So good, in fact, that I wish like hell I had written it. First place all day long. 
    LikeReply 13 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you, Steve, for your continued support of my poetry. I am grateful.
      LikeReply 12 months ago
  • mk.e.spear
    It was the memories and feelings the poem evoked. The poem reminded me of feelings I've had after losing someone I loved. It made me cry, and after I've had time to cry, I usually feel better. I thought it was beautiful. 
    LikeReply 13 months ago
    • susan.brumel
      Thank you again, Mark, for your thoughtful comments about this poem. It’s always nice when a poem I write resonates with the reader.
      LikeReply2 months ago
  • barbbrig3
    LikeReply 13 months ago

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