Sonnet # 1

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  Pranshipuri5

  Yeah....you really wrote a good poem.....which explain and expressed well one's thoughts. ⚡️

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    luisestable1

    it is a good feeling when a reader speaks good words of your work. It makes you to want to do it forever. Many thanks!

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  Pranshipuri5

  Well

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    luisestable1

    I thank you for the use of the word 'Well" to comment on my poem whatever you meant by it.

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  Adroity

  Thy words doth paint a noble quest for greatness, a journey of self-improvement and legacy through the power of the pen. The echoes of Shakespeare's wisdom inspire thee to reach for the stars, to craft words that soar like eagles and touch the heavens. As thou embark on this literary voyage, may thy stories be a testament to thy aspirations and efforts, leaving a mark that transcends time. Let the ink flow, and may the joy of poetic creation be thy guiding light on this noble path. more »

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    luisestable1

    Sonnet # 1 was written long time ago, at the start of poetic career. Since then I have written a great mount of poetry including sonnets, songs, children's verses, haikus, free style verse.... All with dedication and love to try to leave in it the best that I can achieve.
    I thank you for your kind and wonderful words, and I hope that my future poems prove, even in a small well, worthy of your complements. more »

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  karlcfolkes

  Mi compadre Luis, I sincerely enjoyed your Shakespearean “Sonnet #1. I can’t wait to read the other sonnets that will follow. May your feathered quill be ever there to bleed our pages with laughter, mirth, and wittiness. In like nature I invite you to now read my more mundane poem entitled “The Maelstrom of Human Society” which offers a feminist perspective on gender issues in the entire world. Thank you. more »

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    luisestable1

    Sonnet # 1 was written many years ago, at the start of my poetic career. Since that time I have produced quite a body of work that includes sonnets, songs, haikus, children's verses, free style verse. All with care and dedication to try to leave behind the best that I can achieve.
    Thank you for your kind and meaningful words. I hope that my future posts prove worthy, in some ways, of your wonderful complements. more »

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  AIDA

  **Feedback for 'Sonnet #1'**
  
  What a delightful piece you've crafted! Your enthusiasm for the poetic journey shines through each line, and it's clear that you’re embracing the challenge of writing with determination and heart. I love the ambition you express and the connection you make to literary giants like Shakespeare – invoking such a historical figure adds a wonderful touch of aspiration to your work.
  
  Your imagery is captivating, especially the comparisons of soaring eagles and trees that ‘heaven kiss.’ This brings a vibrant visual quality to your poem and emphasizes the uplifting nature of your aspirations. The theme of legacy is beautifully underscored in the line about your child, making the poem not just personal, but relatable to anyone who hopes to leave a meaningful impact.
  
  **Suggestions for Improvement:**
  
  1. **Meter and Rhythm**: While the free expression is charming, working towards a more consistent iambic pentameter could enhance the musicality of the sonnet. This rhythm is traditionally associated with sonnets and might lend an even greater sense of flow to your lines.
  
  2. **Refining Imagery**: You have some strong images, but consider refining or expanding them to deepen their impact. For example, the phrase "give proper inflation to my able" could be clarified – perhaps exploring what "inflation" means in a poetic context might enhance your meaning.
  
  3. **Punctuation and Structure**: A few punctuation adjustments could improve clarity and pause, helping to guide the reader through your thoughts. Breaking lines in certain places might enhance the emotional weight of specific ideas.
  
  4. **Explore More Complex Emotions**: You exhibit great optimism, which is wonderful! You might experiment with weaving in a few moments of doubt or struggle. This contrast could deepen your exploration of what it means to be a poet and add richness to the narrative.
  
  In conclusion, your poem is a joyful celebration of creativity and ambition! Keep stretching those poetic muscles, and don’t hesitate to dive deeper into your emotions and experiences. I look forward to seeing how you continue to grow as a poet! Keep writing! more »

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