The Fall of a Wounded Lancelot (A Satire)

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  karlcfolkes

  Thanks, Alan. I’m indebted to you and to the graciousness of all my readers.

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  alanswansea18

  Beautiful.

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  karlcfolkes

  Thank you, Pranshipuri5.

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  Pranshipuri5

  Ohhh....what a lovely poem you wrote....

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  jn.selvadurai

  Love the humour and the clever rhyme. Thank you.

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  karlcfolkes

  Adroity,
  Thank you for taking the time out to provide an in-depth commentary on this poem. It is greatly appreciated.

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  Adroity

  Your poetic tale weaves a narrative of Vance's aspirations and downfall, symbolizing the consequences of actions taken in pursuit of ambition. The imagery of his misguided dance and eventual demise reflects the theme of reaping what one sows. The cautionary lesson embedded within the verses serves as a reminder of the interconnectedness between choices made and their repercussions, emphasizing the importance of integrity and authenticity in one's endeavors. The reference to a deceitful tweet further underscores the impact of misinformation and its potential to sway outcomes, urging vigilance in discerning truth from falsehood in the realm of politics and beyond. more »

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  karlcfolkes

  Thank you all my readers for taking the time to offer your invaluable comments.

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  karlcfolkes

  Thank you for your valuable response.

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  beg_d

  I love the way the poet used a fictional kingdom to describe the situations of the present day government... Internet piece of artwork

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  karlcfolkes

  Thank you, Emile, for your comments. Pray that we all in this ever changing world of ours remain healthy, fit and safe.

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  Emile

  Such melancholy poured into this poem, I loved it.

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  Havehope

  Brilliant!!!! I love it.

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  karlcfolkes

  On the ball, jerry. Thank you.

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  jerryl.01657

  LOL. That, Fellow Poet, Iz Politics. (My Applause.)

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  karlcfolkes

  Immensely appreciated. Thank you, talygarza.

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  AIDA

  **Feedback for "The Fall of a Wounded Lancelot (A Satire)"**
  
  Wow! What a wonderfully clever and engaging poem! Your use of satire to explore the themes of ambition, disappointment, and the harsh realities of public life is both thought-provoking and entertaining. The playful language and rhythmic flow make it an enjoyable read, while your references to classical imagery, like Lancelot, effectively enrich the satire and provide a strong context for the message.
  
  I especially loved the juxtaposition of the aspiring candidate's initial confidence with his eventual downfall. Lines like "no one admired his Boogie-Woogie-Bounce dance" brilliantly capture the absurdity often found in political campaigns, and your clever wordplay adds a fun twist throughout. The final lesson, emphasizing how our actions have consequences, rounds out the poem beautifully and leaves the reader with a meaningful takeaway.
  
  **Suggestions for Improvement:**
  
  1. **Imagery Enhancement**: While your poem features great wordplay, consider adding more vivid imagery in certain places. For example, elaborating on the setting could further immerse the reader in the scene. What does the audience look like? How do they respond to Vance's performance?
  
  2. **Varied Meter**: The rhythm is mostly consistent, which is great, but experimenting with variations in meter could enhance certain lines for comedic effect. A few strategically placed variations might keep the reader more engaged, reflecting the chaotic nature of the subject matter.
  
  3. **Character Development**: Introducing more characterization for Vance or his audience could deepen the emotional resonance. A couple of lines capturing their thoughts or reactions could enhance the satire and provide a contrast to his hopeful aspirations versus the reality he faces.
  
  4. **Exploration of Themes**: While the message about the consequences of one’s actions is clear, you might explore additional dimensions, such as public perception or the fleeting nature of fame, to add layers to your satire.
  
  Overall, you've crafted a delightful and insightful piece that showcases your creativity! Keep up the fantastic work, and I look forward to reading more of your satirical poetry in the future! more »

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