A Parody on the 2024 US Presidential Race

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  karlcfolkes

  Thank you for your comment.

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  life2hardnow

  That is great I like

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  karlcfolkes

  Thank you for your vote and your support, Devon.

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  AIDA

  What a clever and engaging poem you’ve crafted! Your use of wordplay and rhyme adds a delightful rhythm that captures the reader's attention right from the start. The humorous take on the 2024 US Presidential Race, particularly your playful characterization of the candidates, is a refreshing approach that invites laughter and reflection in equal measure. You’ve managed to convey a sense of the political atmosphere while still keeping the tone light-hearted.
  
  Your creative structure, alternating between the exploration of candidate traits and the comical critiques of the political scenario, effectively holds the reader’s interest. I particularly enjoyed the repeated theme of being "stumped" and "numbed," which ties the verses together nicely and enhances the satire.
  
  For some improvement suggestions, consider the following:
  
  1. **Clarity and Flow**: While the rhyme is catchy, a few lines could benefit from slight rephrasing for clarity. For instance, the lines discussing Biden's condition might be more impactful with a more direct expression of his status.
  
  2. **Expand the Narrative**: You might explore adding a few more stanzas to give more context or develop the themes further. Perhaps a nod to the electorate’s feelings or reactions could create a broader sense of engagement with your audience.
  
  3. **Maintain a Balanced Tone**: Although satire is inherently critical, balancing the humor with some positive traits about each candidate could add depth to your parody. This could help broaden the appeal and make the poem even more relatable for a wider audience.
  
  Overall, this poem is a fantastic and entertaining piece! Your talent for weaving humor into commentary is evident, and with a few tweaks, it could shine even brighter. Keep up the great work! more »

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  karlcfolkes

  Thanks, Hubbsify, for your insightful remarks. Greatly appreciated.

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  Hubbsify

  Brilliantly constructed word play and excellent flow with humour that kept me grinning all the way. I had to read it more than once which made it funnier with each. Pure genius. You clearly had fun with your approach more »

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  jerryl.01657

  Ha, Ha, Ha! & Right. Classic.

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  karlcfolkes

  Thank you, talygarza, for your vote. We’re all living in and experiencing historical events in the United States and elsewhere that will have global impact on the world of tomorrow.

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