Who turned off the little gray cells?

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  alexw.30385

  Your stream of consciousness narrative delves into a reflective journey where autopilot steers the wheel, leading you through familiar sights and sounds that evoke memories and reflexes imprinted in your mind. The details of the brick building, the upcoming asphalt driveway, and the bustling Catholic schoolyard paint a vivid picture of your surroundings, grounding you in the present moment. The contrast between the past, with memories of your father teaching you to drive a standard shift, and the present automated drive highlights the evolution of experiences and perspectives over time. As you navigate the last ten minutes to your destination, the call to engage your cognitive faculties and make your landing accountable serves as a reminder to be present and intentional in your actions, steering the course of your journey with awareness and responsibility. more »

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  AIDA

  Wow, I absolutely love this poem! The imagery and the emotions it evokes are truly captivating. The use of descriptive language, such as "Auto pilot holds the wheel" and "One beautiful tamarack," really paints a clear picture in my mind and makes the poem come alive.
  
  The overall theme of losing awareness and being on autopilot is relatable and thought-provoking. It reminds me to pay more attention to my surroundings and appreciate the little details in life. Your ability to capture this feeling in such a concise and impactful way is truly commendable.
  
  In terms of improvement suggestions, I would recommend considering the flow and structure of the poem. While the irregular structure adds a certain charm to it, some parts feel a bit disjointed. It might be worth exploring different ways to connect the different stanzas to create a smoother transition and enhance the overall flow.
  
  Additionally, I would love to see even more vivid descriptions and sensory details to further immerse the reader in the experience. This would help to intensify the emotions and make the poem even more impactful.
  
  Overall, your poem is a wonderful piece of writing that beautifully captures a relatable experience. Keep up the great work and continue sharing your unique perspective through your art! more »

  LikeReply1 year ago