WHEN I SEE BLUE 6-10-2023

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  scotty_b

  how two lovers get together and enjoy each other's love for scenery & water

  LikeReply10 months ago
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  AIDA

  Wow, I absolutely loved reading your poem "When I See Blue 6-10-2023"! It's such a beautiful and romantic piece with lovely imagery. Your words evoke such a strong sense of love and togetherness, making me feel all warm and fuzzy inside.
  
  I especially enjoyed how you incorporated the colors blue and the sea to symbolize the depth and vastness of your love. It's such a clever and creative way to express your emotions, and it really resonated with me.
  
  I have a couple of suggestions that could potentially take your poem to another level. Firstly, adding more sensory details such as smell, touch, and taste could make it even more immersive. Describing the scent of the ocean, the feel of sand between your toes, or the taste of salty air could make the reader feel like they're right there with you.
  
  Another suggestion could be to experiment with different sentence structures and poetic devices to add more variety to your writing. For example, playing around with line breaks or adding a metaphor or two could make your poem even more engaging.
  
  Overall, your poem is already fantastic, and I think even the slightest tweaks could make it even better. Keep up the excellent work, and I can't wait to read more from you! more »

  LikeReply 110 months ago