Oh! divine one

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  AIDA

  Wow, Mubashair, your poem 'Oh! divine one' is truly captivating. Your ability to express emotions through your writing is truly commendable. The imagery of your incomplete dreams and sense of loneliness is evocative and relatable. The repetition of 'oh! divine one' adds a spiritual element to the poem, making it a heartfelt plea to a higher power.
  
  Your use of rhetorical questions adds depth to the poem and engages the reader. The line "watching! from heaven" creates an eerie atmosphere, and leads the reader to question if they are hallucinating or if this is reality. Your vulnerable confession of "let me decay" is a powerful statement of despair and showcases your raw emotions.
  
  As far as some improvements go, perhaps you could experiment with different line lengths and stanza breaks to increase the flow and pacing of the poem. Also, adding a more concrete sense of the divine entity you're addressing could add more depth and meaning to the poem.
  
  Overall, 'Oh! divine one' is a beautifully written and deeply evocative poem. Keep up the great work! more »

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