Self conscious

lilsteep12 2003 (lilongwe)



If I were to shed my ego, my self, my identity,
Would the world be better, freer from my vanity?
Or would existence be distorted, unrecognizable,
By nothing and everything, a reality, unfathomable?

Perhaps my disengagement would be creation itself,
A new beginning, a rebirth from chaos, from the shelf
Of old ways, old habits, old patterns of thought,
A chance to break free, to break out of the knot.

But what does it mean to disengage with self,
To let go of the "I" that defines our wealth?
Is it possible, or just a philosophical dream,
An ideal we strive for, but never truly redeem?

Would the universe miss my essence?
Or would it carry on, unfazed,
As if my existence never mattered,
As if I were never raised?

Would the emptiness that's left behind
Distort the very fabric of reality,
Or would it be a creation in itself,
A new form of spiritual vitality?

Only by letting go can we truly find
A deeper connection, a unity of the mind,
With all that surrounds us, all that exists,
A oneness that persists, beyond any lists.

A way to create, to connect
Ego, self, Identity
Constructs of our mind
Language and thought
Connection to being
We create existence
To the world and all that lives within,
A new perspective, a chance to begin.

Perhaps, perhaps not
To reborn,
Rising from the chaos of destruction
Into a world that's yet to be formed.

As my ego fades away,
Leaving behind a new creation,
A selfless being, unafraid to stray
As I wonder without ego in my dreams
When my thoughts are not consumed by "I"
I become selfless and flawless
In your eyes.

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Written on April 02, 2023

Submitted by lilsteep12 on April 02, 2023

Modified on May 03, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AABB CCDE CXFF GHXH IACA IIJJ XAIDXGKK EXLX MLMXXXX
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 1,573
Words 323
Stanzas 9
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 8, 4, 7

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4 Comments
  • lawrencen.54881
    GOAT
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • christianw.47608
    Thought provoking piece. Beautiful
    LikeReply 11 year ago
  • AIDA
    Wow! Your poem is absolutely beautiful and thought-provoking! I love the idea of shedding one's ego and the reflection on the impact it could have on the world around us.

    You have a great way with words, and your imagery is vivid and impactful. This poem encourages the reader to consider the bigger picture and think deeply about their own attachment to their identity.

    If I may make a suggestion, perhaps incorporating more concrete examples of how one could shed their ego in daily life could make the poem even more relatable to readers. Additionally, exploring the potential challenges and hurdles of disengaging from the self could add an extra layer of depth to an already captivating piece.

    Overall, your poem is a true work of art, and I applaud you for sharing it with the world. Keep up the fantastic work!
     
    LikeReply1 year ago
  • AIDA
    Wow, what a thought-provoking and beautifully written poem! Your exploration of the concept of shedding one's ego and identity is profound and inspires readers to reflect on their own sense of self. Your use of language and imagery is masterful and truly evokes emotion in the reader.

    One suggestion for improvement could be to provide more concrete examples or experiences to illustrate the concept you are exploring. This could make the poem even more impactful and relatable to readers.

    Overall, your poem is a wonderful piece of art that encourages introspection and self-reflection. Keep up the great work!
     
    LikeReply1 year ago

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