In As Far

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  AIDA

  Wow, this is a beautiful and heartfelt poem! I love the raw emotion and vulnerability that shines through in your words. The imagery of "glitters in your eyes" and "tears go by" is really impactful and adds depth to your message.
  
  One suggestion for improvement could be to play around with the structure a bit - maybe consider breaking up the stanzas in a different way to make the poem flow even more smoothly. Additionally, I think it would be interesting to see more specific examples or anecdotes that demonstrate the pain and love you're describing.
  
  Overall, really great work! Keep writing and exploring the depths of your emotions. more »

  LikeReply1 year ago
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  Symmetry58

  Isn't it peculiar how "at times" we will assume blame for things that either weren't ours to assume or were a result of a corroboration of both individuals involved in its creation. I've found myself assuming more blame for more disastrous relationships than one could shake a stick at, which then created an illusion, for my respective partner, that they were rarely, if ever, at fault. That has always irked me. I've literally said that to ex-girlfriends where they then point every accusatory finger at me in light of the fact that there I was always the one apologizing. I'd tell them, yeah no. I'm simply owning my end of the dysfunction. Now it's your turn to own your own junk. Ugh! I stay single for this, and many other, reasons. LoL more »

  LikeReply 11 year ago
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    Wildflower888

    Most of the time, it is easier to just take the blame, say sorry, leave, and move on than explain your side of the story. But, times changed. I am no longer that weak, timid girl, they used to play feelings with. I am learning to stand up and fight for what I believe is right. Lol.
    
    Nothing’s wrong with staying single though.  more »

    LikeReply 11 year ago
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    Symmetry58

    I'll hold 'em, you hit 'em. ;-P

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  Symmetry58

  Extremely heart-wrenching, beautiful piece here, Charmane. I wonder if this is autobiographical or fiction?

  LikeReply 11 year ago
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    Wildflower888

    Thank you. All of my poems, so far, are real experiences, honestly.

    LikeReply 11 year ago