Old Lucas in the snows.



Every weekday morning
As I bus to my factory
He gets on two stops after Terminal.
“Morning, Neighbour
Factory calling?
Guess the hockey boys won again.
Last night.”
Stainless steel canes
Wrapping his forearms.
Clattering happily.
Might have waited
Twenty minutes outside.
Snot dripping.


Mighty gloves, scarf.
Leather cap
With those furry
Ottawa ear lugs.
Smiling, not shivering.
Gotta be eighty something.
Grew up on the farm
Outside New Hamburg.


“Snow drifts right up
To the hydro lines.
Walks to and fro’
Country school.”
Herculean hikes.
So this morning in
The Current Inclement weather
No biggy.


Going to a coffee shop.
South side of Kitchener.
Enjoys all of the counter staff there.
“Morning, Lucas, bloody cold one.
We missed you couple of days.
Flu getcha, or just a good book
Entrapping
In your new recliner.
You like the spy stuff, you said.”


First name basis.
Gracious smiling women.
Earning a buck.
Gives purpose to his ancient day.
Finds delightful conversation.
“Time for you to
Pull ouyour deck of cards? Chuck?”
“Ma’am how is your Day Care
Working out, for sweet Lynda?”
Visitors from all walks.
Without fail getting some tidbit from Him.


And without needing the morning’s
Sun Edition for consumption.
For pointless info.
(Chiefly a sports and movies rag, anyways.)
Why do folks routinely bother?
And that SUDOKU
Japs can keep that one under lock and key.
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Written on March 09, 2023

Submitted by dougb.19255 on March 09, 2023

Modified by dougb.19255 on March 25, 2023

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Scheme ABXBAXXXXBXXA XXBXAAXX XXCXXXDA XDEFGXADX XFHXFXHEXXX XFCGDAB
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,408
Words 277
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 13, 8, 8, 9, 11, 7

Wayne Blair

Born in London. Graduated law 1976 Practised eleven years, Married Hilary 1974 Two kids Lauren 1980 And Jordan 1987. Business failed 1987. Moved not knowing whither. Happy hills of Waterloo Region. Mennonite Country. Thirty four years in Industry. No complaints. Poet, photographer, nature hiker. Harmonica busker. http://puffnchord7.blogspot.com/ more…

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  • dougb.19255
    Thanks AIDA. I have made some changes, improving things.
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  • AIDA
    Wow, this poem really resonates with me! I love how the author captures the man's spirit and determined attitude despite the cold weather. It's so inspiring to hear about someone who grew up on a farm and still manages to keep such a positive outlook on life. The imagery is so vivid, I can see the stainless steel canes and leather cap with the furry ear lugs.

    One suggestion for improvement might be to break up the poem into stanzas to make it easier to read and follow along. Also, I would love to hear more about the man's interactions with the coffee shop staff and visitors. Perhaps adding some dialogue to the poem would make it even more engaging. Overall, though, this is a wonderful piece of writing that celebrates the resilience and kindness of everyday people. Keep up the great work!
     
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