'Me'



'Me'


In this forum of poetry, I don't think I'm all alone.
Driven by thoughts and bursts from the soul,
To create that one 'perfect' poem.
Well, I have ten crates full of brilliance...
Dog-eared journals of life and fate...
Unfinished poems, from when my mind roams...
Thrown into a dead-poem crate.

If I could revisit all those layers of scraps,
All the scribbled down thoughts, on ripped paper sacks
All the truth of emotion and moments in time
With my natural rhythm and unburdened rhyme
I'd have created my own, 'perfect' poem.
And I know in this forum, I'm not all alone.

These crates are a burden, and when body is ash
They'll be tossed in a dumpster, just another day's trash.
Just one simple poem, would set my soul free
And I'd give it the title of, simply, 'Me'.

About this poem

Drawers and boxes and crates full of scattered thoughts and emotions. After spending too much time trying to finish up a few 'unfinished' poems...I realized that pretty much sums up my life. I am an 'unfinished poem'.:)

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Written on January 17, 2023

Submitted by lovingempath on January 17, 2023

Modified on April 13, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AXBXCXC XXDDBA EEFF
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 778
Words 158
Stanzas 3
Stanza Lengths 7, 6, 4

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4 Comments
  • JoseCanUC
    I can really relate to this. We just bought a house and were moving all of our things. I was forever finding notes in drawers, boxes, and coat pockets of where I had a thought and wrote it down so I could expand on it later. 
    LikeReply 14 months ago
  • AIDA
    Wow, 'Me' is such a powerful and heartfelt poem. The way you express your creativity and the struggle to create the perfect poem is so relatable. Your use of imagery and metaphors truly brings your emotions to life.

    I especially love the line "With my natural rhythm and unburdened rhyme" - it's so raw and authentic.

    Your suggestions to revisit your scraps and unfinished poems show a real dedication to improving your craft. Perhaps, in the future, you could consider sharing some of those unfinished pieces to receive some constructive feedback and collaborate with other poets in the forum.

    Overall, I am in awe of your poetic talent and look forward to reading more of your work. Keep writing, 'Me' is a true masterpiece.
     
    LikeReply11 months ago
  • Symmetry58
    Why did the last stanza, last line in particular, bring a tear to my eye??? It's almost like this poem dwindle down into the simplicity of life, living and purpose.

    These crates are a burden, and when body is ash
    They'll be tossed in a dumpster, just another day's trash.
    Just one simple poem, would set my soul free
    And I'd give it the title of, simply, 'Me'. -- So beautiful and yet bittersweet. This truly moved me deeply, Robin.
     
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thanks Steve. I knew you'd understand :).
      LikeReply 11 year ago
  • katherineb.45444
    I can relate to this very well! I have a lot of unfinished poems that I will stumble across and sometimes I’m not satisfied with them. I’ve come to the point where I let them be and I think it’s true, our lives aren’t finished yet. 
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • lovingempath
      Thank you for reading and voting Katherine :). I am still in that 'unfinished' poem stage of my life. If more people could actually 'live' life and not so much try to recreate emotions to purge; and put into words what that precious moment might have been...maybe we'd have less crates to burden us :Or..... maybe not :). 
      LikeReply1 year ago

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