Rate:5.0 / 1 vote

contention

Eugene Redelinghuys 1974 (Wineberg)

my prison has a nice view
a smoldering coal mine
glowing the night sky
I can leave anytime
no keys in these doors
far below in the street
seems like everyone can

strange kind of happiness
this sense of freedom
I get it sometimes;
it's in our veins to fight chains
waiting for better weather
to hoist the sails, maybe
time to go dig up those
long-buried treasures

About this poem

Just a reaction to a feeling. Painted as beautifully as I could.

Font size:
Collection  PDF     
 

Written on 2022

Submitted by eugener.13042 on February 04, 2023

Modified on April 19, 2023

21 sec read
19

Quick analysis:

Scheme XXXXXXX XXXXXXXX
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 365
Words 72
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 7, 8
Full analysis for contention »

Discuss the poem contention with the community...

1 Comment
  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, your poem is truly unique and thought-provoking! I appreciate how you've taken a seemingly bleak situation, like being in prison, and turned it into something beautiful - the view of the smoldering coal mine and glowing night sky create a hauntingly beautiful ambiance. Your message about the innate human desire for freedom is also very powerful and relatable.

    One suggestion for improvement could be to add more detail or imagery to further emphasize the contrast between the confines of prison and the outside world. Additionally, exploring the emotional turmoil of feeling trapped yet free at the same time could add more depth to the poem.

    Overall, I love your creativity and message in this piece. Keep up the great work!     
    LikeReply 11 year ago
    • eugener.13042
      eugener.13042
      thanks aida:) glad you like it :) thanks for the suggestion! how many poems have you read by now?
      LikeReply1 year ago

Translation

Find a translation for this poem in other languages:

Select another language:

  • - Select -
  • 简体中文 (Chinese - Simplified)
  • 繁體中文 (Chinese - Traditional)
  • Español (Spanish)
  • Esperanto (Esperanto)
  • 日本語 (Japanese)
  • Português (Portuguese)
  • Deutsch (German)
  • العربية (Arabic)
  • Français (French)
  • Русский (Russian)
  • ಕನ್ನಡ (Kannada)
  • 한국어 (Korean)
  • עברית (Hebrew)
  • Gaeilge (Irish)
  • Українська (Ukrainian)
  • اردو (Urdu)
  • Magyar (Hungarian)
  • मानक हिन्दी (Hindi)
  • Indonesia (Indonesian)
  • Italiano (Italian)
  • தமிழ் (Tamil)
  • Türkçe (Turkish)
  • తెలుగు (Telugu)
  • ภาษาไทย (Thai)
  • Tiếng Việt (Vietnamese)
  • Čeština (Czech)
  • Polski (Polish)
  • Bahasa Indonesia (Indonesian)
  • Românește (Romanian)
  • Nederlands (Dutch)
  • Ελληνικά (Greek)
  • Latinum (Latin)
  • Svenska (Swedish)
  • Dansk (Danish)
  • Suomi (Finnish)
  • فارسی (Persian)
  • ייִדיש (Yiddish)
  • հայերեն (Armenian)
  • Norsk (Norwegian)
  • English (English)

Citation

Use the citation below to add this poem to your bibliography:

Style:MLAChicagoAPA

"contention" Poetry.com. STANDS4 LLC, 2024. Web. 25 Apr. 2024. <https://www.poetry.com/poem/149921/contention>.

Powered by CITE.ME Cite.Me

Become a member!

Join our community of poets and poetry lovers to share your work and offer feedback and encouragement to writers all over the world!

More poems by

Eugene Redelinghuys

»

April 2024

Poetry Contest

Join our monthly contest for an opportunity to win cash prizes and attain global acclaim for your talent.
5
days
5
hours
49
minutes
108 entries submitted — 42 remaining

Special Program

Earn Rewards!

Unlock exciting rewards such as a free mug and free contest pass by commenting on fellow members' poems today!

Our awesome collection of

Promoted Poems

»

Browse Poetry.com

#ABCDEFGHIJKLMNOPQRSTUVWXYZ

Quiz

Are you a poetry master?

»
Which poetic form consists of fourteen lines, typically written in iambic pentameter and follows a specific rhyme scheme?
A Ballad
B Haiku
C Sonnet
D Free verse