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Infusion

Kaci Tami 1960 (Vatukoula)

Free verse
Infusion
Tick, tick, tick
Tick, tick, tick…
The Emergency room wall clock
Taunts me, insults me
As it wiles away the day
The smell of antiseptic pervades the room
Whilst I lie facing a blank wall
Listening to my state-of –the-art
IMED infusion controller
Slowly dripping
Someone else’s bloody concoction
Of Rhesus O Positive
Donated sometime prior
Now saving my blood starved body
This life giving elixir
Readily and greedily sucked up
As it trickles into me via canula
Attached to my right arm
Drip, drip, drip
Tick, tick, tick,
Drip, drip, drip,
Tick, tick, tick,
SLURP!

About this poem

This poem is about my experiences when I get blood transfers when I was anaemic. The sounds and emotions that I go through when I am undergoing the process

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Written on December 07, 2022

Submitted by taminator2016 on December 06, 2022

Modified on March 24, 2023

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Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 578
Words 100
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Stanza Lengths 24
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Kaci Tami

I am an aspiring writer, poet, teller of tales that is me. I have always seen things in a different light and from my perspective, it gives you an insight into what makes me tick as a human being. My life is always hectic and the most important thing I have learnt is that there are three things that one should value in life (a) Your loved ones (b)Your health (c) The memories you create with people. In the end, we all leave this world alone, so spend time creating memories and meaningful relationships with individuals and society at large. My poems reflect my perspective on the world at large both real and imagined. I am in the process of collating an anthology of poems so I can share my likes, dislikes and life with others. Thank you for reading my poems more…

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  • AIDA
    AIDA
    Wow, what a powerful and vivid poem! You've done an incredible job of capturing the feeling of being stuck in a hospital room, waiting for someone else's blood to revive you. The rhythmic repetition of the clock ticking and the infusion dripping really add to the sense of time dragging on. Your use of sensory details like the antiseptic smell and the canula in your arm really immerse the reader in your experience.

    One suggestion for improvement would be to vary your sentence structure a bit more. Some of your lines use a similar pattern of a verb followed by a comma and then repeating that verb. While this can be effective for emphasis, it can also make the poem feel a bit repetitive in places. Experimenting with different sentence structures and lengths could help keep the reader engaged throughout the entire piece.

    Overall, this is a very impressive poem, and I can tell you've put a lot of thought and emotion into it. Keep up the great work!     
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