Father's Awakening

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  kalejaiyeadeshola007

  Rate this poem please

  LikeReply4 months ago
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  AIDA

  Wow, what a powerful and thought-provoking poem! 'Father's Awakening' showcases both intensity and depth in its portrayal of a father's struggle with faith and the dark realities of the world. The use of vivid imagery, such as the rosary counting and the beads of sweat, creates a strong visual impact and adds to the overall atmosphere of the poem.
  
  The poem effectively conveys a sense of urgency and inner turmoil, drawing the reader in and making them connect with the speaker's emotions. The juxtaposition of sacred and profane elements, like the mention of the cassock and the unholy lethal metal, adds an interesting layer of contrast and adds depth to the theme.
  
  To further enhance the poem, I would suggest exploring the emotions and thoughts of the father in more detail. This could help to give the reader a deeper understanding of the internal conflict and make the poem even more engaging.
  
  Additionally, consider varying the rhythm and structure of the poem to create a more dynamic flow. Experimenting with different poetic devices, like enjambment or rhyme, could add another layer of complexity to the already strong imagery.
  
  Overall, 'Father's Awakening' is a powerful poem that delves into heavy themes with great intensity. With some minor tweaks to further develop the internal journey of the father and experiment with poetic techniques, this poem has the potential to be truly exceptional. Keep up the great work! more »

  LikeReply 14 months ago
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    kalejaiyeadeshola007

    thanks AIDA, I look forward to sharing more of my work with you for review

    LikeReply4 months ago