Hotel room( original by points north)



I can't breathe now, yeah I'm fucked though,
Rolling my dice, I had to let go.
Finding space in my crowded mind, Holding strong to what i know now
(bridge)-
And its hard  to die this hard
I'm afraid of what you'll convict me for
Even though I know it wasn't our fault
I can never seem to get that far
Bridge-
All these voices
Bars, lines, lyrics
The worst part's over
But I'm still (broken)
'Cause now my heart feels like a cheap hotel room!
(rent me out, let myself down, wish i could get that far, i hate saying that part)
And if I  ever wake up, I know ill be scared until noon
Blood on the dance floor, Are you out there? (everywhere)
I never got a chance to see whats out there.
I connect dots on a dandelion ceiling.
Waiting on Sharpest of cuts to come and find me, before I do.
Spending my time in the Tree house
Holding strong to my love now,
I'll keep you entertained with my dark thoughts
100 000 words for a soft spot
And I'm afraid of reliving this part
I'm afraid of what you'll convict  me for
Even thought I know it wasn't our fault
I can't ever seam to get that far
All these voices
Bars, lines, Verses
The worst part's not quit over
But I'm still (healing)
'Cause now my heart feels like a cheap hotel room
(rent me out, let myself down, wish i could get that far, i hate saying that part)
And if I  ever wake up, I know ill be scared till noon.
Blood on the dance floor, Are you out there? {your everywhere}
I never got a chance to see the sky above me.
I connect dots on a dandelion ceiling
Waiting on Silence to come and find me, before I do.
(the sharpest of cuts , ill keep you entertained with my thoughts.)
interlude-
All these voices
(broken hearts not beating)
Bars, lines, Verses
(can we clear this)
The worst part's not quit over
(THE HURRICANE FROZEN OVER)
But I'm still (Growing),IM STILL HEALING
'Cause now my heart feels like a cheap hotel room
(rent me out for a night, checkouts at noon)
And if I  ever wake up, I know ill be scared till noon.
Blood on the dance floor, Are you out there?(Everywhere)
I never got a chance to see the sky that's out there.
I connect dots on a dandelion ceiling
Waiting on Silence to come and find me, before I do.
(the sharpest of cuts , ill keep you entertained with my thoughts.)
Interlude out-
(-you are numb (Her)
-what?- how can you say that?(Him)
-no, I'm serious, you feel nothing, You aren't here, come back to me love.
-I cant do this on my own(Her)
What?
I've always been here (him)
is that so because?life is about to come find me.(Her)

About this poem

Being alone at home in my room. with thoughts all around.

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Written on September 12, 2022

Submitted by Sholnyshko42 on September 12, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

2:39 min read
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Quick analysis:

Scheme aabCdefgCHijkLMnooPqrbstmefgHHJpLMNouPQSvHpHwJjpLnNooPQSxjyzj1 yj
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 2,515
Words 509
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 64

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