A Comment on Time



My feet burn in pain.
The hot, rough, coals below me.

It hurts me.

Vague waters.
Deep, unending abyss.
A forever ocean.

It scares me.

Claws, like a cat!
Fangs, like a wolf!

he sees me.

who can truly see me?
when I die.
when I go.

and away I go.
out of right now.
into tomorrow,
into the week, the month and the year after that,
I knew you
you knew me
We existed along each other,
now we barely know of each other,

my other half

I can see you.

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Needles of Red Mercury (Cats on Tango.mix)

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Submitted by bluejay1985 on April 07, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Scheme XA A XXX A BX A AXC CXCBDAEE X D
Closest metre Iambic dimeter
Characters 454
Words 120
Stanzas 10
Stanza Lengths 2, 1, 3, 1, 2, 1, 3, 8, 1, 1

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