The Halls of Heaven



It was just before my time was to come.
I would be leaving Thy presence, until it was done.
“It will be hard,” Thou had told me,
"How hard you know not,
How exquisite you know not,
Yea, how hard to bear you know not,
But fear not, for I have already sent
Your older Brother, and He will make it all right.”

Then, Thou didst hold me in Thy arms for five hours,
Comforting, speaking to and loving me,
Preparing me for what was to come,
For it was very, very scary.
“I'll come down, when it comes to this time,
And witness to all, that if you truly love me,
I will not let you fall, but in due time,
You will conquer and fulfill all your godly call.”

Then, with trepidation and faith,
I walked with the Son to the portal,
And when to the place, we left with a kiss,
As Jesus said in a peaceful whisper,
“My son, you will put me through more
Than anyone else, but you’re worth it.
I know who you are to become to me.”
And we parted in a loving embrace.

Now, it wasn’t more what I would do,
Which would make Him suffer so,
But what would be done to me,
That would cause me to wholly abandon Him, and go.
Then at the peak, when my life was much too bleak,
I totally decided to take the spiritual leap,
And jump off into all oblivion,
Where Satan has all dominion.

So with Satan and all his devils,
His whole host prodding and shouting on,
My Father did something so miraculous,
For His hurting, rebellious little son.
He hurriedly left the halls of heaven,
Where He is sung to, loved and adored,
And rushed to our earth so sordid, so full of hate and scorn,
And faithfully fulfilled what he vowed to that morn.

Yes, my Father, the God of all the universe,
Left His heavenly throne, to rescue among the demon’s
Hateful harm and abase, wrapping me faithfully in His arms,
Pulling me steadily away from that ledge,
While I screamed and kicked Him in the face.
I will not repeat the words I cried,
As I cursed my Father so, but all the while
He knew who I really was, and would not let me go.

So there it had happened, as He said I would see,
“I will personally come down to save you,
And bring you back with Me.
I went down into the depths of hell to rescue you,
And I’d do it all over again, because you are my son,
And never ending friend. I will never let my children fall,
Who truly love me, and give me their all.
Our relationship will never end, for I am Thy Father, Amen.”

About this poem

This was a vision of the pre-earth life I had of myself with God, before coming to earth. It was meant to be a preparatory experience, for helping me face my earthly life.

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Written on May 25, 2003

Submitted by ShaneB-Z on January 19, 2022

Modified by ShaneB-Z on July 06, 2023

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Scheme ABCDDDXX XCACECEF XXXXXXCG HICIXXBB XXXBBXJJ XXXXGXXI CHCHBFFX
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 2,421
Words 530
Stanzas 7
Stanza Lengths 8, 8, 8, 8, 8, 8, 8

Shane Brown

I am a family man of God first and foremost. I love my wife, two sons and daughter very much. After this, my life pretty much revolves around technology, music, writing, poetry, drums, dancing, singing, and building others up. I love helping to build bridges between people, and individually and collectively uplifting mankind. I love learning, and pro-actively gaining experience from what I've learned, then sharing my joy with others. My life is dedicated to loving and serving my Lord, through helping and blessing others. more…

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  • AIDA
    This poem, "The Halls of Heaven," is a powerful expression of the love and sacrifice of a father for his son. The heartfelt emotions and vivid imagery truly capture the reader's attention and create a deep sense of awe and gratitude.

    The author skillfully conveys the fear and uncertainty of leaving the presence of God and embarking on a challenging journey. The use of repetition in phrases such as "How hard you know not" and "You will conquer and fulfill all your godly call" adds emphasis and reinforces the message.

    The unexpected twist when the son contemplates abandoning God adds a layer of complexity and depth to the poem. The descriptions of Satan's influence and the struggle of the son are vividly portrayed, evoking strong emotions in the reader.

    One improvement suggestion would be to consider refining the structure of the poem. While the content is powerful, there are moments where the flow could be improved. Paying attention to the rhythm and pacing of the verses could create a stronger impact and enhance the overall reading experience.

    Additionally, exploring more varied and unique language choices could further elevate the poem. While the existing descriptions are effective, adding some unexpected and evocative imagery could enrich the reader's engagement with the poem.

    Overall, "The Halls of Heaven" is a passionate and thought-provoking poem that celebrates the enduring love and unwavering support of a divine father. With a few tweaks to the structure and a touch of inventive language, this piece could truly shine as a testament to the power of faith and redemption.
     
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