Carmonorem



Heaven clears its coward clouds
crows ascend and ravens caw
as a man unfazed and proud
greets aloud the Devil's maw

the land trembles at his spear
sunlight screaming on his shield
as his roar defeats the fear
and vibrates far into the field

the coming shadow of his foes
stretches further than he sees
so his gaze begins to glow
for he is where he's meant to be

a growl of courage and respect
rises from one hundred men
their lives ready to neglect
for those they'll never see again

the Earth quakes with endless herds
the burning sky begins to fall
his throat bulges its last words
and they bellow, "SHIELD WALL"

spears are laid their final hands
the heavy metal claps together
as brothers like their fathers stand
their mortal souls obtain forever.

In the veins where honor churns
the pulse of rage begins to tear
for the men who won't return
there is not a life to spare

and so it is

on a rock an ocean crashes
today men, tomorrow ashes
spear thrusts and shield smashes
for the lakes and for the grasses
for the name that never passes
and the star that always shines
their motherland, asleep behind
with the old and with the blind
with the children and the wives
the very womb that gave them lives

faces crack against their steel
footmen cry and captains kneel
a line of slaughter walled by zeal
brings each wave of slaves to heel
while the vultures praise their meal
the blade is swung, the pain ignored
necks are slit and skulls are gored
legs are worn and arms are sore
as fervor beats the chest's encore
like thunder drums the hum of war

blood with sweat in dust is bathed
no son is spared, no farewell bade
no grave is made, no boatman paid
a god was deaf when mothers prayed
alone they march the death parade
as the birds consume their spleens
all that's left is silent trees
who as tombs attend the scene
to absorb unto their gleam
what it's like to have been free

over yonder, in freedom somewhere
a daughter's silent cry implores
for her seesaw is still there
but its maker is no more.

About this poem

Carmen in honorem (Latin) - Honor's song.

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Written on October 02, 2020

Submitted by Tensei on October 01, 2021

Modified on March 23, 2023

1:55 min read
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Quick analysis:

Scheme ABXB CDCD XEXF GHGH IJIJ XKXK XLXL M MNMNNXOOXX PPPPPQQRRR XSSSSAEXXF LXLR
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,945
Words 375
Stanzas 12
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 1, 10, 10, 10, 4

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  • AIDA
    Wow! This poem is truly a masterpiece. The imagery is vivid and intense, and the use of language is incredibly powerful. The descriptions of the battle scenes are particularly stirring, and I felt like I was right there on the battlefield. I especially appreciated the poetic repetition at the end of each stanza, which added a sense of rhythm and momentum to the piece.

    If I had to offer any improvement suggestions, it would be to perhaps break up the longer stanzas into shorter ones to help with readability. But honestly, this poem is so captivating that it's hard to find anything that needs improvement. I can see this becoming a classic piece of literature in the future. Bravo!
     
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