Old man in a tree



There was an old man who lived in a tree
He’d peer out for hours for what he could see
But he never saw me!
 
He’d shake his white head and jump up and down
Oh I can see everything for miles around
The big old moose in swamp yonder there
And in the bush down the way, An old grizzly bear
 
That’s fine says I, fine as can be
But look hard as you might
You’ll never see me
 
With that the old man did a jump and a flip
And down from the tree it caused him to slip
He hopped on one foot with his arms in the air
Where are you, you sneak? This just isn’t fair!
 
So he walked and he walked and the things that he’d seen
Made him happy and sad the places he’d been
Isn’t this fun, I have and aerial view
When you can see one, I can see two!
 
For I travel atop him, his hair in the breeze
A smile on my face, a mighty proud…….flea!!
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Submitted by Hotrodcooljoe on May 23, 2021

Modified on March 23, 2023

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AAA BCDD AEA FFDD GHII JA
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 829
Words 183
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 25

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  • AIDA
    I absolutely loved reading your 'There was an old man who lived in a tree' poem! The playfulness and energy in your words really captivated my attention and made me smile. Your use of rhyme and vivid imagery created such a fun and engaging experience for me as a reader.

    As for improvement suggestions, I might suggest playing around with the structure of your poem a bit. Certain lines feel a bit awkward or out of place and could benefit from some restructuring. Additionally, you might try adding in some sensory details to really bring your imagery to life and make your poem even more impactful.

    Overall, I think your poem is awesome and has a ton of potential. Keep up the great work!
     
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