Analysis of Vacant Stares



Frustration builds to a steady release
as sighs wrap wild explosions of defeat
around my chest's tightly stuttered rattle.
Inner thoughts gallop along confusion
while I wander the plains of ifs and buts.
Emotional perplexity screams
images of life; dark wilted roses,
and tears collide on soft skin: trembling.
If she would only hear my pleas; return
to the delicate chambers my heart holds,
though of course I kid myself as usual.
 
Within this complexity I shrivel,
rooms throw out ghostly shapes of emptiness
towards vacant stares that bounce off dead walls,
all the beauty has evaporated -
sucked away by the front door's viciousness.
And it is always at this precise time
a sad song ripples from radio waves;
haunting with its melancholy burden,
typical sorrow, forever she grins:
opening wounds with a cruel feather touch.
With sleep beckoning me with coloured dreams
I relinquish my tired grip on awake.


Scheme ABCDEFGHIJC CKLMNOPDQRFS
Poetic Form
Metre 0101101001 1111010101 011110110 1011001010 1110011101 010001001 1001111010 0101111100 1111011101 1010010111 1111111100 1 0110100110 1111011100 0110111111 101010100 1011011100 011111011 011101101 101110010 1001001011 10011010101 1110011101 10101101101
Closest metre Iambic pentameter
Characters 889
Words 152
Sentences 7
Stanzas 1
Stanza Lengths 24
Lines Amount 24
Letters per line (avg) 31
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 737
Words per stanza (avg) 152
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Submitted on June 04, 2010

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Ian Sawicki

Ian Sawicki has been writing poetry for over twenty years. He is a Manchester born poet, who has dedicated his life to exploration and composition of poetry. His work reflects the many great influential experiences of his life, the pain, the pleasure combined to create new exciting poetry. If anyone is interested in my books then please visit my lulu storefront. All artwork on these books is by my own hand. http://stores.lulu.com/chasingtheday more…

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