Analysis of bitter old man



each day i sit
and watch the light
drain from your face
into the night

from concious mind
 into the deepest sleep
i hear those stutters
of the fear that creep

when my eyes open
 as i taste the wake
my first thought is of you
 and the next breath you take

as you stumble up
from your lay of state
i cant but wonder
 are you punished by fate

left alone
 in this barren place
forever cursed
 to wear this face

quietly pleading
 the morning away
that this may be
 your final day


Scheme XABA XCXC XDXD XEXE XBXB XFXF
Poetic Form Quatrain 
Metre 1111 0101 1111 0101 111 010101 11110 10111 11110 11101 111111 001111 11101 11111 11110 111011 101 01101 0101 1111 10010 01001 1111 1101
Closest metre Iambic dimeter
Characters 451
Words 94
Sentences 1
Stanzas 6
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 24
Letters per line (avg) 16
Words per line (avg) 4
Letters per stanza (avg) 62
Words per stanza (avg) 16
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Submitted on October 09, 2013

Modified on March 05, 2023

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clifton redmond

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