Analysis of Gratitude, with sand in the shoes.

Doug Blair 1951 (London)



Could i ever repay
This moment
Lakeside and
Nearing the close
Of Cottage week
Near Goderich.
Rained for three days
And chilly for August.
Monopoly gave us an excuse.
Battleships and crosswords.
TV reception not too bad
From across the waters.
Fourth day glorious.
SUN.
Sand in the CROCS.
Eye full of bikini detours.
That was two days.
Splashing tossing the kids
In frolic. In silliness.
Closest touch in months.
And now tonight.
Grandparents arrive
Like pony soldiers.
Taking over.
We hit the the sands of dusk.
Like when we were teens.
Lovers even then.
Huddled in sweat suits.
Bare feet let out of the stalls.
Holiday, ah yes.
The Best.
Bringing back
What we needed.

(Doug and Hil, looking back from our seventies)


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Poetic Form
Metre 111001 110 10 1001 1101 11 1111 010110 010011101 1001 11010111 101010 11100 1 1001 11101001 1111 101001 0100100 10101 0101 1001 1110 1010 1100111 11101 10101 10011 1111101 1011 01 101 1110 101101110100
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 721
Words 149
Sentences 25
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 33, 1
Lines Amount 34
Letters per line (avg) 17
Words per line (avg) 4
Letters per stanza (avg) 283
Words per stanza (avg) 62
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Written on January 28, 2023

Submitted by dougb.21370 on January 28, 2023

Modified by dougb.21370 on January 28, 2023

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Doug Blair

Doug was once a lawyer. Frustrated. Went broke 1987. Turned to manufacturing. People talked straight. Worked hard. Listened when appropriate. Lead Hand Shipper and Workplace Safety. Married to Hilary 1974. Two kids Lauren and Jordan. Poet. Photographer. Hiker-photographer. Harmonica busker. http://puffnchord7.blogspot.com/ more…

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