Analysis of In The Presence



Man made time given,
To minds restricted to boundaries.
And limited to labels placed.
As an expectation,
The creation of rules made...
Will be followed and obeyed.

No one born blessed with life to get,
Is never beyond the sight...
And always in the presence of their Maker.
Regardless of the name to call,
That which is always present.
To be relied upon to deliver,
That which is always present to do if asked.

'What do you mean,
If asked?'

'You know how you annoy,
Without it to be asked but still you are there?
Until you are determined,
To deliver in your presence...
A headache delivered from you to someone?'

'Why do you say such negative things to me?'

'I am making a positive point.
Don't always expect from me,
Judgement to pass.
As I attempted to say,
What you do to annoy has its benefits.
Think of it this way...
When people begin to lower their heads,
In the presence of something you said.
With it then to look as if annoyed?
Be proud to know,
That skill is yours to keep as your talent.'

'I never thought of it like that!'

'Trust me.
That talent to have seldom goes unnoticed.'

'Why?'
For what?'

'I thought you were going to say,
Something negative.
About how and the way I communicate.
I just want to be understood.'

'And you do that very well.
Some folks have unique ways,
To express their appreciation.'

'I never thought of it that way.'

'Do.
And eventually,
You will notice even better ways to improve.
Especially if you begin to ask them,
More questions before they leave you...
Talking about yourself.
Done to give as a hint AND clue.'


Scheme AXXABB XXCXDCE XE XXXXA F XFXGXGXXXXD X FX XX GXXX XXA G HFXXHXH
Poetic Form
Metre 11110 110101100 01001101 11010 0010111 1110001 11111111 1100101 0100101110 01010111 111110 1101011010 1111101111 1111 11 111101 01111111111 0111010 10100110 010101111 11111100111 111001001 110111 1011 1101011 11110111100 11111 1100111011 001011011 111111101 1111 1111111110 11011111 11 11011101010 1 11 11101011 10100 0110011010 1111101 0111101 111011 10110010 11011111 1 001000 111010101101 0101101111 11001111 100101 11110101
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,584
Words 353
Sentences 38
Stanzas 13
Stanza Lengths 6, 7, 2, 5, 1, 11, 1, 2, 2, 4, 3, 1, 7
Lines Amount 52
Letters per line (avg) 23
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 91
Words per stanza (avg) 22
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Written on July 25, 2022

Submitted by lpahtillah on July 25, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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