Analysis of presence
i saw you
in the loneliest moments
of my journey
when time
was just a forgotten myth
and all places dissipated
into nothingness
i saw you
tall and patient
walking through the mist
of fears and doubts
toward me
i was frozen
in the senseless repetition
of my steps which were
invading an untrodden path
with some fading footprints
i saw you
nonchalant and distant
with your eyes fixed firmly
on mine
was it you who first spoke
or was it me?
words didn't have sounds
they had shapes
we watched them
flying
walking
and eventually dying
between us
when the last word
dropped dead
you smiled wryly
and before i could smile back
you turned away
and left
i tried to call you
but i didn't know your name
i called all the names of winds
all the names of stones
all the names of beasts
all the names of flowers
all the names of people
all the names of god
but you didn't answer
i collected all the dead words
and continued my journey
i'm still traveling
up and down the silent slopes
through the weary woods
and along the roaring rivers
each night
i put one of the dead words
in the fire i build in a cozy corner
and watch you
dancing in the flames
you never talk to me
you only dance until
i fall asleep
Scheme | Axbxxxc Adxxbeefxx Adbxxbxxxgggc xxbxxx axxxxhxxfib gxxhxifax bxx |
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Poetic Form | |
Metre | 111 00110 1110 11 1100101 0110100 01100 111 1010 10101 1101 011 1110 0010010 11110 010111 11101 111 01010 111110 11 111111 1111 11011 111 111 10 10 00100010 011 1011 11 1110 0011111 1101 01 11111 1110111 1110111 10111 10111 101110 101110 10111 111010 10101011 0010110 11100 1010101 10101 00101010 11 1111011 001011001010 011 10001 110111 110101 1101 |
Closest metre | Iambic trimeter |
Characters | 1,220 |
Words | 259 |
Sentences | 2 |
Stanzas | 7 |
Stanza Lengths | 7, 10, 13, 6, 11, 9, 3 |
Lines Amount | 59 |
Letters per line (avg) | 16 |
Words per line (avg) | 4 |
Letters per stanza (avg) | 137 |
Words per stanza (avg) | 33 |
About this poem
a mystical encounter...
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Written on October 30, 2016
Submitted by nooshin on April 18, 2022
Modified on April 28, 2023
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