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Stay the Course

Stay the course of lifes pit falls
For lifes a duty to which we are called
No hurt nor harm should make us sway
From that which God gave us that day
We cried and suckled, and as we grew
Are minds were filled with all that was new
We dreamed our hearts desires then
And some even found them when they were men
But all of us have been knocked down
The key is get your but up off the ground
Don't just lay there wimper and wine
Or even worse just go ahead and die
For that's when your life becomes a lie
Our duty is clear we must not shirk
The need to laugh and love and work
For God gave us life that we might live
And in his name we should strive to give
Hope to those with hard lives to live
We do not know what comes tomorrow
Just pray to God it's with out sorrow
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Poetry.com 4 out of 5 based on 0 ratings. 3 reviews.
ARUN MAZUMDER 11 months ago
well done
Annette Partridge More than 1 year ago
So much feeling
yvonne sensing More than 1 year ago
I so agree
Gregory L. Smith More than 1 year ago
Basically a good poem, but it should be reworked to meet the need for meter purity. It is just disjuncted and stiff, and needs to be edited. Butt is with two "T"-s. Whine and wine are different words. The rhythm is not consistent and so it feels weird for the reader.
Russell Smith More than 1 year ago
After looking up meter and reading some examples of metering I can see where your criticism comes from. Thank you. And the lack of punctuation comes from concentrating on the words and not the technical. My apologies, for the misspelled words, it was just an over site, hence the failed attempt to delete the first submission of this work. I will try again to get rid of it. I am not sure if I will be able to correct the meter mistakes easily as I have never studied structure or poetry in general. I didn't know what I didn't know.
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