the pen"s poem
a poem for the sun set scene
it"s rays vanishing from the sand
and from the moving water so clean
gifting a smooth sensation to my hand
a poem for the breeze so smooth and swift
hiting my soul and taking it as a friend
gifting an experience of never ending drift
with no starting and with no end
a poem for the smiles on the faces
on those who read it and enjoy it
gifting a piece for the world"s chase
so smile and enjoy it"s every bit
it"s rays vanishing from the sand
and from the moving water so clean
gifting a smooth sensation to my hand
a poem for the breeze so smooth and swift
hiting my soul and taking it as a friend
gifting an experience of never ending drift
with no starting and with no end
a poem for the smiles on the faces
on those who read it and enjoy it
gifting a piece for the world"s chase
so smile and enjoy it"s every bit
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Poetry.com 4.4 out of 5 based on 9 votes.
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I almost thought I was experiancing your sunset....
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Wonderful work!
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Keep up the good work
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good job
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good job
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nice write
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Good
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a poem for all the things we love in life and cherish this poem is awesome i love it
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You clearly have a good grasp of rhythm and rhyme (although the rhymes are in places predictable), but I don't feel any emotional link to the words from you, or for me.
Also, "its" is possessive, "it's" is a contraction of "it is"
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